A New Life

[Alias_Freak]

"Mommy!" "Daddy!" "Wake up!" "Come on!" Wake up!" cried Devon, a young 6 year old girl. Devon looked exactly like Sydney. She has her hair, looks but has Michaels beautiful green eyes. She was shaking the life out of Sydney and Michael. "One sec honey!" Give us a second and we'll be right there." said Sydney, half asleep. Michael looked at the clock. It was 5:30 in the morning! "Jeeze!" "You'd think the kid would like to sleep in for a little while." said Michael. Sydney and Micheal got up and went into the kitchen for some coffee.

It was 7 years later. Sloane was killed, Sydney finally fufilled the prophacy and beat Sloane. Irina was around, she lives in L.A now (nobody knows where) and visits Sydney all the time. Will is still a reporter for the C.I.A and unfourtunatly, Francie was killed. Yep, that

 

[kate_jones]

This is a good start. It's well written, but one thing I would change is the dialogue. Just start a new line when someone starts talking.
eg)
"Mom?" said syd.
"Sydney?" said Irina.
"Hello" said Vaughn.

Other than that, it's great. Good job and I want more!
~kate

 

[AliasFan4eva]

gREAT SO FAR! I can't wait for more! Could you please PM me when more is up! It would be such a major help! Thanks a million! Great job! INteresting start! Hurry and write more! I can't wait! love ya! ~C

 

[goofygal]

gREAT SO FAR! I can't wait for more! Could you please PM me when more is up! It would be such a major help! Thanks a million! Great job! INteresting start! Hurry and write more! I can't wait! love ya! ~C

ditto. i can't wait for more. this is great! love ya babe~amber~

 

[ariesgirly2lovesMV]

HI great fic so far keep up the great work....

cant wait for more


if it is not to much trouble could you pm when you post more

shaina

 

[sarahh729]

really cute i like devon for the girls name, unique

 

[xdancer]

It looks cute. Keep going.

 

[liliana]

cool start can't wait for more