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Discussion in 'Creative Writing & Arts' started by dangerous_agent, Jun 17, 2003.

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  1. dangerous_agent

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    this is my second fan fic. I'm still working on the frist one but i was reading this book about a teengage spy so i decided to give the CIA one who has a close connection to Sydney. THere is a bit of romance in this but i thought it should go in here instead. Anyways read it, if you like it then tell me if you don't then still tell but either way come back and read the next chapters.

    INDENTITY
    Chapter 1

    Sarah walked into the main lobby. She was attracting lots of stares but she didn't care. She carried on walking straight past the front desk and in to the OPERATIONS CENTRE. The guards looked at her curiously, she seemed to know where she was going, like she worked here but she looked about only 15. Sarah pushed the heavy glass door and entered OPERATIONS. Everyone immediately turned to stare at her. How had a child made it through security to here? That was the question that was on everyone’s mind. Just then someone called out over the silenced room.
    "SARAH!" It was Kendall, somehow he knew this girl and had expected her to come. Just then security guards flooded into the room and formed a circle around Sarah. Two of them detached themselves and came over.
    " Miss you need to leave here immediately, you have no authorisation to be here" One of them said closing in on her. She sighed. Suddenly the guard was on the floor and everyone was staring at Sarah whose leg was still in mid air. The other guard rushed over to her put he too was on the ground in a second, subdued by a swift punch to the forehead. Screams of terror rouse and the other guards drew their guns. They signalled to the CIA employees to get down on the floor. Everyone obeyed and Kendall was the only one left standing.
    "Sir, I asked everyone to get down on the floor. We can handle this." Another guard spoke, putting his arm in front of Kendall who was now marching purposefully towards the girl.
    "Shut up idiot, this girl is with me. She knows Derevko and if you shoot here then you will have cost your country a lot." Kendall said harshly. The guard seemed stunned.
    "This..girl. She's.....with...you?"
    "Yes. Put your guns down men" Kendall shouted. The guards lowered their guns straight away and backed off to let Kendall through. "Come with me Sarah. I'll see to it you get everything you need!" Kendall led the smirking 15 year old away.
    Once in Kendall's office Sarah spoke for the first time.
    "Is Sydney Bristow here?" She asked looking around.
    "Yes she's in debrief at the moment I think. Probably waiting for us."
    "Do you know about my mother and Sydney's relationship with each other?" Sarah asked willing to tell Kendall about Sydney and her connection.
    "Yes I do know but you will not be allowed to tell Sydney anything about it until I feel the time is right."
    "But............"Sarah started before she was interrupted.
    "I don't want to hear anymore about this right now." Kendall said, "Lets go and meet the team shall we?" Sarah nodded and followed Kendall out of the room. As they were walking into to the debriefing room, the employees who had witnessed her appearance gave her cold stares, unfazed, Sarah just grinned back at them.


    HOW FIT IS VAUHGN?
    I LOVE VAUHGN AND I WANT TO DECLARE THAT HE IS NO WAY MARRIED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :redhair:
     
  2. dangerous_agent

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    SECOND CHAPTER!!!!!!
    not much to say so ill just post the chapter.

    Chapter 2

    Kendall opened the door to the debriefing room and allowed Sarah to walk in. He indicated to a chair and she sat down in it, looking at the people around her. There were five other people in there, the woman, she guessed, must be Sydney Bristow. Excluding Sydney and Kendall, she had no clue as to who the others were. There was a man sitting on the opposite side of her who, in her opinion, was as fit as anyone could get.
    "Everyone this is Sarah. She has vital intel on Derevko that will be very useful to us." Kendall introduced her to everyone. They all gave her a weak smile, obviously doubting Kendall statement. "Sarah this is Sydney Bristow, Micheal Vaughn and Dixon, they are all field agents. This is Marshall, he is the gadget man as everyone so fondly refers to him as" A geeky looking guy smiled and attempted to speak but Kendall silenced him with a glare.
    "Kendall, how do we know that this...Sarah,has got the information. Where did she manage to get it from and why is she helping us. She's only 14!"
    "15" Sarah corrected. There was a s****** from Vaughn, "What are you laughing at pretty boy?" Vaughn stopped laughing.
    This girl is tough. I wonder where she grew up. Vaughn found himself thinking.
    "Miss Bristow. I hope you are not judging my decisions. I have always succeeded in deciding what is best for the missions we do and we haven’t failed yet." Sydney muttered something under her breath but Kendall chose to ignore it. " Sarah please tell us everything you know."
     
  3. *SPYnish*

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    It´s Good, Contunue Pleasee, It´s interesting ;)

    ~Natalia~
     
  4. Sarah Vartan

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    great so far! oh yeah..lil OT: What book were u reading bout this spy?
     
  5. Alias Obsessed 47

    Alias Obsessed 47 Rocket Ranger

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    i like it. it is vrey different but i like it. :P
     
  6. spy_girl21

    spy_girl21 Rocket Ranger

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    please continue i like it.
     
  7. A.I.C.

    A.I.C. Rocket Ranger

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    yeah please continue this story.....I like it so far!
    Can you send me a PM when you update 'cuz I'm not so often in this forum and i don't want to miss anything,please! That would be really nice!!!
    Please post more soon!!!!
     
  8. dangerous_agent

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    just so you know i was reading the Anthony Horowitz books about the ENGLISH tennager, Alex Rider, who works for MI6 kinda. anyways i just had this idea that the CIA could recruit this girl and then she turns out to be............ hey hey I can't tell you but she has a close connection with Sydney somehow, I'll leave you to speculate as to what it is!!!
    thanx fot all the comments, and if you haven't read my other fan fic in ROMANCE FICTION then you need to get over there now and read away!!!!
     
  9. dangerous_agent

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    hey
    i finally have a weekend where i have no homework or revision so im gonna post like 6 more chapters.
    please come and read more
    :popcorn: :couch: :offtopic: :spam: :monkey: :playmusic: :phonecall: :run: :poke: :pumpkin: :lame: :kissme: :king: :jump: :lovers: :madfire: :joker2: :jawdrop: :hide: :grad: :frozen: :error: :eekhair: :eek: :money: :cuss: :birthday: :banghead: :argue: :angel2: :abduct: :angelfly: :ph34r: :blink: :wacky: :unsure: :( :mad: :love: :) <_< :rolleyes: :cool: :LOL: ;) ^_^ :confused: :mellow:
    hey its a world record!!!!!!
     
  10. Sarah Vartan

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    That's what I thought! Yes I recently read that book too, it's very good! :)
     
  11. bluheart13

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    Im reading Im reading!!!!!!!!!!!! I like it I like it....and I hope you post more soon.......
     
  12. Archangel_dj

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    Very interesting idea
    I like it so far
     
  13. Moriel

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    this is really good keep going
     
  14. dangerous_agent

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    ok heres the next chapter. i hope you like it and thanx for all the replies.

    CHAPTER 3

    Sarah talked into the rapt silence. Every head in the room was turned towards her, their eyes fixated on her, listening intently. She managed to leave out any detail that would give away her true identity away; the one Kendall had made her promise not to give away until the time was right.
    She finished, saying that she had left Russia to come here. She didn't say she had come here solely to find Sydney and help her.
    "So why do you want to help us?" Sydney said. Sarah knew she wasn't buying the story and personally if she had heard it she wouldn't have believed it either. Anyway she didn't blame her, she made most of it up, filling in the gaps; things she couldn't say. She shot Kendall a worried look, which Sydney caught immediately. "There's something going on that you're not telling me or any of us" Vaughn looked at Sydney and smiled.
    "There's nothing going on, Sarah is simply shy" Kendall explained. Vaughn frowned at this comment; she didn't seem to shy when she had called him a pretty boy. He looked over at Sydney, there was something about this girl that wasn't quite, she wasn't telling them the full story.
    "I'll let Sarah tell me that,”Sydney said, eyeing Kendall with distrust. Sarah decided she would tell Sydney her secret, no matter what Kendall had told.
    "Alright. I'll tell you if that's what you want. I came here to find you and tell you anyway but Kendall said i should wait. " Sarah said, staring right into Sydney's eyes. "I'm not shy, far from in fact; pretty boy over there knows that. I...... Irina Derevko, she's............she's my...........mum! Sydney, you and me are sisters" Sydney looked shocked at first but then she laughed, shrugging it off.
    "Right"she said laughing. "Right, yeah. You're the sister I never knew I had! What so are you saying that my dad is your dad?"
    "No. I'm only your half sister, I've got a different dad.......but he's......he's dead. You shot him in a raid!" Sydney looked stunned at the last bit, it had all started to sound very real now. She swallowed absorbing the information she had just received.
    "I'm sorry" was all she managed to say, before she got up and ran out of the room. Vaughn was quick to follow, shooting Sarah a look of disbelief.
    Damn, that guy is fit! She thought.
    "Well, that's why I told you not to tell Sydney just yet. She's fragile, if you like, at the moment. You know she has been missing for two years?" Kendall said.
    "Yeah actually I do, if you didn't realise my mother was part of the plan to kidnap her" Sarah said harshly. She felt sorry for Sydney, she'd been through a lot recently; she really didn't have any right to drop that on her.
    "You will stay at this safe house. I'll send agent Vaughn along with you; he'll stay with you tonight. Meet me here at 5.00pm"Kendall said, getting up and striding out of the room.
    "Wow, Syd has a sister" Sarah heard, she turned to see Marshall and Dixon sitting talking among themselves. She rolled her eyes and left the room, in search of Sydney.

    hope you like it, ill try and post more soon
    thanks again :shamefullyembarrased:
    oh yeah and if you haven't already read my other story in ROMANCE FICTIOn then read it, its called REALITY. :woot:
     
  15. A.I.C.

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    It's great!!! I like it!
    and thanks for the PM! :woot:
     
  16. Archangel_dj

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    Keep going it's great :D
     
  17. dangerous_agent

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    i dunno if anyones still interested in this fic cos I haven't been updating it for ages. I've been concentrating all my efforts on REALITY. anyway this is my last but two day of school and I have no homework so i thought I'd make some more up.
    Hope you guys like it.

    CHAPTER 4?

    Vaughn ran after Sydney.
    "Syd? You OK?" He called after her. She stopped and turned to face him. She wiped the tears from her eyes and put on a fake smile.
    "Yeah I'm fine. Why wouldn't I be?" She said. "I mean my mom has got another daughter by someone who isn't my dad. And her new daughter just showed up at the CIA and it had been planned and people knew and they didn't tell me....." she broke down in to tears. Vaughn reached out to her. "Don't. I.......I don't wanna talk you to either right now. Betrayal is kinda a big thing in my life at the moment."
    Vaughn took his hand away and a pained expression placed itself firmly on his face.
    "Syd, are you gonna use this against me all the time?" He said, running a hand through his already scruffy hair. He heard footsteps behind him and turned around.
    "Hey Pretty Boy....Syd." Sarah said, walking up to the pair. Sydney looked away, tears still pouring gently from her eyes.
    "Um....Vaughn is it?" She asked. Vaughn nodded, a vague smile on his face. "Yeah, can I get a moment with Sydney?" Vaughn obliged and walked a little way off towards his desk. He sat down and began rifling through papers, occainsionally glancing over at the two sisters.
    "What do you want" Sydney said. Her eyes not meeting Sarah's.
    "I wanted to talk to you about what I just told you." she said. "You didn't seem to pleased to find out I was like your long lost sister. I mean I didn't ask to be your sister. Believe me if it was my choice I would have been like the child of Brad Pitt or Ben Affleck.......although then it would be really pervy if I fancied my dad.....huh I never thought of that. Maybe I could be one of his friends daug...." Sydney rolled her eyes. "Right. Back to the point. My mum has never been there for me either so I didn't have it any better than you. My dad was killed and my mum was always away on 'missions'. I mean if anything I had it worse than you"
    "Since when has this been about who had it worse. It's about the fact that my 'mum' moved on from my dad and had another kid" She let more tears escape her eyes.
    "So why are you taking this out on me. I didn't exactly sit in nowhere and think 'Hey wouldn't it be a laugh if I made Sydney's mum, who has pretended to be dead, move on and have another kid and that kid could be me. And then I might go and help my sister but instead she grills me'. Yeah that's exactly what happened."
    "Stop being sarcastic. This is quite serious to me."
    "Oh and it's not to me. Like I'm your sister who has no feelings." Sarah shouted at Sydney. People turned and stared at them.
    Oh my days, we really are sister. We're fighting like kids. Sydney thought.
    "You know what I'm sorry. I shouldn't have bitten your head off like that."
    "No thats not......what...sorry. What did you just say?" Sarah asked looking puzzled at Syd's sudden change of heart.
    "I said I'm sorry. Friends?" Sydney asked. The tears had stopped and she was smiling, although deep inside she was still hurting because of her mother's betrayal and the fact that Vaughn had moved on in the two years she had been missing.
    "Sisters" Sarah said. She hugged Sydney who turned and walked towards the doors. Vaughn came up to her.
    "You alright?" He asked watching Sydney leaving. Sarah saw the look in his eyes. The look of love.
    "You should tell her." she said and turned in the opposite direction towards Kendall's office. Vaughn was shocked by her comment although he understood fully what she had just told him. She was unique that girl. Very unique. He stood, pondering her words. How would he tell her though, she didn't want to talk to him. He flopped into his chair and stared aimlessly at a picture of him and Syd, two weeks before her disappearance. His eyes welled up with tears but he didn't bother to wipe them away.

    Hope you like it. That all came to me while I was sitting here right now listening to Busted. CREEPY. Busted are my muse........or muses
    keep checking for more. I have a feeling it might get more interesting.
     
  18. A.I.C.

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    You didn't PM me, did you?
    Sorry for not replying earlier....nice chapter....
    Please post more soon! :woot:
     
  19. dangerous_agent

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    right I'm gonna pos more before I go on holiday. YAY.
    after thursday I wont be updating any of my fics for two weeks cos I'll be in PORTUGAL.

    CHAPTER 5
    Sarah knocked on Kendall's office door.
    "Come in" He yelled from inside. She opened the door a fraction and popped her head round the door.
    "Hi."She said so quitely that it was barely audible. Kendall stared at her.
    "What do you want?" He said angrily. Sarah could see the spit flying from his mouth. She swallowed hard.
    "You said that you'd tell Agent Vaughn to sta with me tonight. So....have you?" She asked. Kendall glared at her, not blinking. She stared right back.
    "I will tell him now. Do you know where he is?" He said, diverting his eyes.
    "Yeah. I'll go and get him then" Kendall nodded not taking his eyes off his work. Sarah backed out of the door and walked back to Vaughn desk.
    She found him staring at picture of him and Sydney. Next to that picture was another of a pretty blonde.
    "Who's that?" SHe said, indicating towards the picture of the blonde. Vaughn jumped and slammed Sydney's photo down.
    "Uh....oh that's my wife. Olivia" He said. He did not look at the picture he was speaking of.
    "Right......so Kendall wants you in his office" Sarah said. Vaughn jumped to his feet, gateful for an excuse to get out of the conversation. He started towards Kendall's office but stopped when he realised that Sarah was following him. He turnd to stare at her. She smiled and walked past him, back into Kendall's office. He followed after a while and when he entered he found her sitting in a chair, flippig through files that were strewn over Kendall's desk.
    "Agent Vaughn" Kendall said, not caring about the files Sarah was reading. If that had been anyone else they would have been fired. "I want you to take Sarah Derevko, now Sarah Price, to the safehouse. As she is only a minor I would like you to stay with her tonight. And Sarah has also persuaded me to let Agent Bristow, younger, stay as well so you look like a family." Vaughn's face blanched. He had to stay a whole night with Sydney. He looked over at Sarah who grinned at him and he knew that she had set it up for them.
    "Fine" He said and left the room. Sarah ran after him.
    "Let's get mom and go home, dad" She said loudly. Vaughn clenched his hands into a fist.
    "Alright. Hurry up though. I'll meet you in the front hall" He said and wandered off towards his desk. Sarah smiled and went to find Sydney, although she was sure se had left by now.

    how do you like it. I might be able to post one more chap but i dunno.
     
  20. A.I.C.

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    Great update! And thanks for the PM!
    please post more soon! :woot:
     

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