Life and Love

omggggggggggggg plzzzzzzzzzzzz write more, plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz, i am literally begging, it was really really really good!
 
Why am I always the last one to get to a story? Oh yeah, b/c my school is stupid. Alright, your turn for the griller.

First of all, SPELLCHECK! I am begging you, if you respect your readers, you just copy and paste each chap in a program where you can check your spelling and your grammar. Also, give a little more description to each scene. You have the basics, which is really good, but I'm just feeling like there needs to be a little more description.

Okay, I'm done :yawn:

~Me :angel2:
 
hey you guys! sorry that i haven't posted in a while! i have been really really busy! i will try to type some more tonight and post tomorrow but i'm not sure. anyway! thank you for replying to my story! love you babes! goofygal!
 
this is really good!! i know you asked me to reveiw for you, and i have been really busy and haven't been able to, but its really good!! i do have two suggestions for you, and maybe you already do this, in which case, you can just ignore my suggestions.
1. Write your section on paper first, then when you are ready to type it up, you'll get a chance to read it over again, check for any mistakes and even add to some sections that need it. that's what i do, and i have found that its really helpful.
2. when you are writing dialogue, picture them saying it in an actual episode. pretend that JJ wrote the script and you are watching the next episode....and ask yourself, is this something that these characters would say? you probably already do that, and most of the stuff you wrote in your chapters i can picture the characters saying...so....GOOD WORK! and i can't wait for more!!!!!!!
 
kay! thanks! i don't really have much time to do that like a lot so my new chapters are going to take longer to write! love you guys!
 
Hey! I don’t think that anyone is reading my fic anymore, and if they are I don’t think that they like it very much. Whatever! I wrote this part anyway. I hope that you dudes like it! (By the way, everything in italics is someone’s thoughts.)
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Chapter 3 continued: Resolutions

SYDNEY’S HOUSE

Why hasn’t he called me yet? Sydney thought as she climbed out of her shower and rapped a fluffy white towel around her. Maybe he just doesn’t love me. It’s not like I can just call him ad say,” I’m so sorry that I was mad for a good reason”. That would just be dumb. Did I just say dumb? I sound like such a preteen.
Sydney walked across her room still wondering why Vaughn wasn’t calling her and why she sounded like such a preteen. She stopped at her dresser and glanced at a picture that was perched on top of some of books. It was of her and Vaughn, about a week before when they had been to the park. She started to become depressed when she saw the happy looks upon their face and the way the held hands. Sydney knew that she was over reacting, but this was the love of her life and she couldn’t lose another person that she loved. She couldn’t lose him like she did Danny and Noah. Not this time.
As she started to slip on a pair of red sweatpants and a white tank top she saw the phone laying on the nightstand. Sydney began to walk to the phone, but she couldn’t bring herself to it. She was too stubborn. He would call her. She knew that he would.
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VAUGHN’S CAR

Okay. Do I have the flowers? He glanced to the right and saw the red roses that he had just bought on the passenger seat. Check. Do I smell bad? I hope not because I can’t check when I’m driving. Last, and most important. Do I have my wits? I sure do…I hope.********************************************

SYDNEY’S HOUSE

Sydney sat staring absent mindedly at the TV which was showing a rerun of The Late Show. Usually she would have been very entertained by watching a mindless talk show(which had Brad Pitt on it at the moment), but she wasn’t. She didn’t care. She just wanted Vaughn to be there holding her in his strong arms.
“DING-DONG”
The doorbell rang bringing Sydney out of her thoughts. If that is those brainless teenagers playing ding-dong ditch again they are going to regret it. I wish they would just die. Okay, that was mean. You really need to get some more sleep. She walked to the door thinking about how she could harm the little delinquents. Sydney reached the chrome doorknob ready to scream and yell. Then she swung open the door and there, standing in front of her, was the love of her life.
“Um… hi Sydney,” Vaughn said.
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Hey! I hoped that you dudes liked it. If no one reviews I am just going to stop writing this. So please review. I love you guys!
 
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