pennstatechic
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Keep going, keep going it's really good! I love it, write more soon, please!
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Alias Elle
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That... was slightly harsh. Constructive criticism is the key to helping a writer write better, not saying how bad their writing or spelling is. A.) It's not that bad and B.) It's her own style of writing. It's what makes her writing unique.alias101 said:
~Me :angel2:
aliaschica47
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oh dont listen to alias 101 she is my best friendand likes to critizes me on my writing
aliaschica47
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vaughn had no idea what had come over him, he walked over, leaned down and kissed her, at first she was adament and almost embarrased but then she got lost in the kiss.
Finally breaking apart, vaughn was on both of his knees so he was looking straight into her eyes (she was sitting)
"vaughn" said sydney blushing
"lok syd, I don't know about you but i have been waiting forever to do that" he said
"so have I, but just, protocal" she finished
"protocal, who cares, look before you came into my life I would have never done that, I would never break a CIA rule, EVER, but you changed me" he admitted
"I was the same" she said smiling
"well now that we are on the same boat, do you want your sandwhich?" vaughn asked smiling
"of course" she answered
* * *
"Agent Dixion, since Bristow wount be back for a few more days, you will be doing this op solo" he said
"you are to go to the chemical plant in jerusalem and switch it with this one" said sloane handing Dixion a fake syringe
"what does the real one do?" asked Dixion
"ahh it is a serum formed by Rambaldi, it cures the common cold, but of it is distributed to people not infected they will die long slow deaths, so you see we wouldn't want it to fall in the wrong hands" sloane said flashing one of those phony smiles
"ok" dixion said all his strength focusing on not jumping across the table and killing Sloane
"Agent Dixion, your counter mission is easy, just switch the real one with this" said wiess handing Dixion another fake syringe
"ok thankyou" dixion said turning on his heel and walking out to his car
* * * *
"hmm lets see Billy Madison or Queen of the Damned?" sydney asked vaughn
"lets see do I want nightmares or laughing so hard I cant breath" he teased
"ok im taking that as billy Madison" she said putting the DVD in the player
shampoo is better....I go on first and clean the hair.....no conditioner is better I leave hair silky and smooth...
"oh my God, that is great" vaughn said cracking up
Somehow within five minutes vaughn and syd had gone from opposite ends of the couch to being in each others arms laughing hysterically
where the hell is he....im starving......I had some triscuts in the car you should have had some.......well if you had told me there were delicious triscut crackers in the car i could have had some.........sorry.......well sorry dosent put the delicous triscut carackers in my stomach now does it carl?
"hey Vaughn do we have any triscuts?" asked sydney suddenly craving them
"um lemmi see" vaughn sayd untangling himself from sydney and walking to the cabnet
"only if you like fat free ones?" he teased
"ohh yes" syd cheered
taking the Triscuts she ate about two and then put them down
(the movie has ended)
"ok so I went to all the trouble of getting up for those triscuts and you eat two" vaughn teased
"hey im a girl i have that privilage" she shot back
"ok well i was thinking, I just found the key to the basement, so you want to go check it out" he smilied mischeviously
"wouldn't think about not doing it" she said
"ok he said picking up the keys and grabbing her hand
opening the door, they walked down a flight of stairs
they turned on the light and were astonished by what was in front of them
One room had a huge tv a music system and a large over stuffed couch,
the other was a fully equipted fitness room and the last was a huge indoor pool
"geez vaughn why are just now telling me there is a basement" she nagged
"sorry, i just found the key" he said putting his hands up
"you didn't think that was the only level did you, its a pretty tall house" vaughn asked
"well i guess i didnt comprehen that yet" she admitted
Ok have to get some sleep if i want to watch the super bowl and alias or else i will be a wreck in school tommorow
Finally breaking apart, vaughn was on both of his knees so he was looking straight into her eyes (she was sitting)
"vaughn" said sydney blushing
"lok syd, I don't know about you but i have been waiting forever to do that" he said
"so have I, but just, protocal" she finished
"protocal, who cares, look before you came into my life I would have never done that, I would never break a CIA rule, EVER, but you changed me" he admitted
"I was the same" she said smiling
"well now that we are on the same boat, do you want your sandwhich?" vaughn asked smiling
"of course" she answered
* * *
"Agent Dixion, since Bristow wount be back for a few more days, you will be doing this op solo" he said
"you are to go to the chemical plant in jerusalem and switch it with this one" said sloane handing Dixion a fake syringe
"what does the real one do?" asked Dixion
"ahh it is a serum formed by Rambaldi, it cures the common cold, but of it is distributed to people not infected they will die long slow deaths, so you see we wouldn't want it to fall in the wrong hands" sloane said flashing one of those phony smiles
"ok" dixion said all his strength focusing on not jumping across the table and killing Sloane
"Agent Dixion, your counter mission is easy, just switch the real one with this" said wiess handing Dixion another fake syringe
"ok thankyou" dixion said turning on his heel and walking out to his car
* * * *
"hmm lets see Billy Madison or Queen of the Damned?" sydney asked vaughn
"lets see do I want nightmares or laughing so hard I cant breath" he teased
"ok im taking that as billy Madison" she said putting the DVD in the player
shampoo is better....I go on first and clean the hair.....no conditioner is better I leave hair silky and smooth...
"oh my God, that is great" vaughn said cracking up
Somehow within five minutes vaughn and syd had gone from opposite ends of the couch to being in each others arms laughing hysterically
where the hell is he....im starving......I had some triscuts in the car you should have had some.......well if you had told me there were delicious triscut crackers in the car i could have had some.........sorry.......well sorry dosent put the delicous triscut carackers in my stomach now does it carl?
"hey Vaughn do we have any triscuts?" asked sydney suddenly craving them
"um lemmi see" vaughn sayd untangling himself from sydney and walking to the cabnet
"only if you like fat free ones?" he teased
"ohh yes" syd cheered
taking the Triscuts she ate about two and then put them down
(the movie has ended)
"ok so I went to all the trouble of getting up for those triscuts and you eat two" vaughn teased
"hey im a girl i have that privilage" she shot back
"ok well i was thinking, I just found the key to the basement, so you want to go check it out" he smilied mischeviously
"wouldn't think about not doing it" she said
"ok he said picking up the keys and grabbing her hand
opening the door, they walked down a flight of stairs
they turned on the light and were astonished by what was in front of them
One room had a huge tv a music system and a large over stuffed couch,
the other was a fully equipted fitness room and the last was a huge indoor pool
"geez vaughn why are just now telling me there is a basement" she nagged
"sorry, i just found the key" he said putting his hands up
"you didn't think that was the only level did you, its a pretty tall house" vaughn asked
"well i guess i didnt comprehen that yet" she admitted
Ok have to get some sleep if i want to watch the super bowl and alias or else i will be a wreck in school tommorow
SpyGurl001
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Ok, who was the genius of puttin' alias after the superbowl???? I know its going to put the rates but ok I'm going to die tomorrow cuz I'm going to stay up and watch it! Loved the chap (right on screw protocal!!) he he keep posting!
aliaschica47
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I know same it took my 5 hours to convince my parents to let me stay up
Alias Elle
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I'm just... astonished. this was good writing... yeah...
sorry, head's still spinning...
~Me :angel2:
sorry, head's still spinning...
~Me :angel2:
aliaschica47
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Ok im really sorry i know that youall are liking thing but......NOW THAT IT FINALLY HAPPENED......Its no fun anymore, sorry but anybody is welcome to finish it up for me............
I AM THEY HAPPISET PERSON ALIVE RIGHT NOW!!!!!
SYD AND VAUGHN FINALLY KISSED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I AM THEY HAPPISET PERSON ALIVE RIGHT NOW!!!!!
SYD AND VAUGHN FINALLY KISSED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
SpyGurl001
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Ok, Yes I LOVED Phase One. Hands down BEST ep ever!! Vaughn and Syd OMG!!!! thank u God and of course JJ (ABOUT TIME!!!) But Sark vs. Vaughn U can't just end it!! Keep going its good!!! h
totallyspies
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i wish that you would continue this...it's great.Syd_Vaughn4ever
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Ur just stopping?????? That was....PLEASE CONTINUE!!!!
Mrs. Karie Vartan
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Yes...please do continue!!!!
-Karie-
-Karie-
FrEeLaNcEr03
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you cant leave off there!! it's so good! please write more!!
Syd_Vaughn4ever
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Well now that we got the crappiest 2 min. or 30 sec. of the finally would you continue
