Through Will's Eyes

Ok, this is my first fic, so tell me what you think!
disclaimer: I do not own alias, If I did I would be rich
This is right after they discover Freplica, and mostly from Will's POV. Irina is Irina, or Derevko, Jack is Jack, Sydney is Sydney or Syd, Vaughn is Vaughn, Will is Will, and you get the picture. This is kind of written like a play.......

~~~~~~~~~~~Chapter 1~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Will's POV
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*I'm sitting in the CIA meeting room, a place I dreamed I'd be in as a little kid, and listening to the fact that the woman I had slept with was NOT who I thought she was, and I had probably leaked secrets that threatened national security. Hey, just another day in Will Tippin's life.*

Kendall- HEY TIPPIN! Are you with us?

*Holy felgercarb* I jumped about 5 feet in the air.

Will-Yes sir.

Kendall-Good. Bristow SR, the ball's in your court now

*Jack totally freaks me out. Maybe because he gave me a shot of heroin a couple months ago. Though his eyes freak me out. They are grey and shifty, hardly ever in the same spot.*

Jack- Thank-you, Kendall.(he stands up) Tippin, we believe that whoever sent out the clone is going to try to capture you and extract any information they don't already know.(he glares at me and I shift guiltily) So we will be sending you to Florida with Sydney.(Jack's thoughts: This chump reporter is depriving us of our best agent when we need her to help clear up the mess HE created? Give me a break!)
She will be posing as your wife. You will be known as Gary and Helen Sharpp.

*Oh yes! I ge to be married to Syd!*

Will-(gulps) When do we leave?

Jack- Your plane leaves in 6 hours. "Freplica" is still at large, so be careful.
 
don't worry, have a ball. jack kind of scares me. but he's in all these movies now, like music man and stuff! huh. suggestion: maybe you could give a little back info, like how they found freplica (unless that's a spoiler or something.) this is interesting, keep it coming! and is francie dead?
 
Yay! New post!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~Chapter 2~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Will's POV
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*I'm in my apartment, packing up my things. I don't beleive it. I have been told to pack up everything, and hop on a plane taking me away from the life I've know in less thean 6 hours. What kind of twisted story is that?
As I'm packing up my clothes, my eyes fell on a long black t-shirt of mine. I gulp. It's the one Francie, or whoever the heck she was wore on the last night we were together. Boy, do I remember that!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~FLASHBACK~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
It was morning, and Francie was just going out the door to go to work.

Will- Hang on a minute, Francie!

Francie- (turns around) Yeah, Will?

Will- I, Um....(slips a small diamond ring over her left ring finger)......was........er...

Francie-(throws her arms around Will) Oh Will, of course I'll marry you!

Will-(smiles & looks estatic)

Suddenly, there are flashing lights and a heicopter overhead.

CIA Agent- (over a megaphone, from in the helicopter) COME OUT WITH YOUR HANDS UP!!!!!!

I did as he commanded. Francie ran. Somebody shot her in the left shoulder, but she kept running. I sank down, because I didn't know if the girl I loved would live or die. I don't know who she was, but almost definately not Francie. I didn't care. I loved her anyway.
~~~~~~~~~~~~END FLASHBACK~~~~~~~~~~~~~

*I hold back the tears that are threatening to fall, and keep packing. I have a plane to catch.
 
I don't think that's a spoiler, I haven't checked. Should I even bother to post more? I don't think anybody is reading but you, fledermaus.
 
Crazy,

I think you're right about readers not really appreciating Will's POV, though I think its interesting to explore. This is a great start. Can I give a little constructive criticism? Just watch the spacing a bit between lines, it just reads a little better. Here's an example...

*I'm sitting in the CIA meeting room, a place I dreamed I'd be in as a little kid, and listening to the fact that the woman I had slept with was NOT who I thought she was, and I had probably leaked secrets that threatened national security. Hey, just another day in Will Tippin's life.*
Kendall- HEY TIPPIN! Are you with us?
*Holy felgercarb* I jumped about 5 feet in the air.
Will-Yes sir.
Kendall-Good. Bristow SR, the ball's in your court now
*Jack totally freaks me out. Maybe because he gave me a shot of heroin a couple months ago. Though his eyes freak me out. They are grey and shifty, hardly ever in the same spot.*
Jack- Thank-you, Kendall.(he stands up) Tippin, we believe that whoever sent out the clone is going to try to capture you and extract any information they don't already know.(he glares at me and I shift guiltily) So we will be sending you to Florida with Sydney.(Jack's thoughts: This chump reporter is depriving us of our best agent when we need her to help clear up the mess HE created? Give me a break!)


If it were to look like this, it would make it easier to follow.

*I'm sitting in the CIA meeting room, a place I dreamed I'd be in as a little kid, and listening to the fact that the woman I had slept with was NOT who I thought she was, and I had probably leaked secrets that threatened national security. Hey, just another day in Will Tippin's life.*

Kendall- HEY TIPPIN! Are you with us?

*Holy felgercarb* I jumped about 5 feet in the air.

Will-Yes sir.

Kendall-Good. Bristow SR, the ball's in your court now

*Jack totally freaks me out. Maybe because he gave me a shot of heroin a couple months ago. Though his eyes freak me out. They are grey and shifty, hardly ever in the same spot.*

Jack- Thank-you, Kendall.(he stands up) Tippin, we believe that whoever sent out the clone is going to try to capture you and extract any information they don't already know.(he glares at me and I shift guiltily) So we will be sending you to Florida with Sydney.(Jack's thoughts: This chump reporter is depriving us of our best agent when we need her to help clear up the mess HE created? Give me a break!)

Just a suggestion. Keep going and hopefully more readers will appreciate this.
GeoGirl
 
That's a good fanfic. I like it and the fact that it's in play format is kinda cool, considering I'm an actor.
 
Yah, I don't want to end the Sydney vs. Elektra fic but I might have to because not enough people are writing what they think about it.
 
heck, if you wanna finish it, just go ahead. people will read it, and then they'll respond. keep going if you want to, express yourself! and the spacing really does help.

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I just have no more ideas of where to go.......I might do more if I'm un-creatively zapped ( is that ven a word?). I have no plot ideas. Maybe I should do more Freplica...... I dunno.
 
Hmmmm........ Why don't you just ask people for ideas and then credit them when you post the chapter.
kylo4
 
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