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Fishi I read your story start and observe as follows: Opening: is good, made me want to read on. If you ever want to sell your work remember that people read the first few line's to see if they're going to buy. You have 30 seconds maximum to make the sale! ___ Conflict: bland. There is...

Hi Fishi Sorry for the delay in responding. I had to go away on urgent business. ___ Thank you for critiquing E2S chapter 1. You will see why I don't give a time frame at the end of the book. Clue: time is circular. ___ I'm very impressed that you got started on your story and I...

You can find the first chapter at http://e2s.webs.com Let me know if you want more and I will mail the next five chapters to you. Why don't you start with a novella of +/- 10k words? Less ambitious but also less soul destroying than failing on a full scale novel. Try to get hold of a...

Hi Jay Do you still need help? Chris

Hi Fishi First I have some questions: How long do you want your story to be? Why do you want your friends to read it? Have you read Freedom by Daniel Suarez? Now some observations: Let your technology explain itself as your story goes along. Make sure you know what it...