Help with short story comp needed

I have a favour to ask you all. ;:smiley:

I have story in a short story competition which wins if it has the most down loads. If you get 5 mins can you down load for me and let me know what you think. I dont think that i will win with the most downloads as dont have the biggest group of friends to ask but the most important thing to me is to find out what people think of my writing.

The app you need to download on your phone is 'Ether Books' and is is free to down load.

Once you are in the app if you search by genre and 1st sci-fi fantasy competition then you can find my entry Tock Tick.

I dont post on here much but always read the threads and you all seem to know what your taking about when it comes to the sci fi type genre so I would be so so so so greatful if anyone could have a read and let me know what you think of my writing style.

Thanks in advance xxx Luce