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'Lost' agent?

Discussion in 'Creative Writing & Arts' started by vaughn_rox, Apr 6, 2003.

  1. vaughn_rox

    vaughn_rox Scout

    Mar 16, 2003
    this is my fist fanfic really sorry if it sux. takes place some time in the future. Disclamer i one none of the characters they all belong to jj. any way heres the story please tell me if it sux

    Micheal Vaughn, Jack Bristow and Eric Weiss were all staring at a big yellow sign on the front of a door. Behind the door is hundreds of marble stars. Stars that are supposed to symbolize a lost agents life. After dying for their country an agent gets a marble star that's hidden from the public. That's it!!
    On the sign are the words 'Under Construction'; to many this would mean nothing but to Vaughn, Jack and Weiss this sign ment everything. They knew that when it came down there would be a knew star. A star for the newest 'lost' agent. Sydney Bristow.
  2. you can't kill Syd! that's just evil! more soon
    --Mandy :angelic:
  3. nancee

    nancee Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    from da hood
  4. vaughn_rox

    vaughn_rox Scout

    Mar 16, 2003
    who said she was dead? i just said she was 'lost'
  5. liliana

    liliana Rocket Ranger

    Jan 8, 2003
    South Africa
    yeah you can't kill Syd.though i suppose kill and lost don't mean the same thing.sounds interesting
  6. vaughn_rox

    vaughn_rox Scout

    Mar 16, 2003
    thnx 4 the reviews here more

    A star usually gives closure to loved ones but to Vaughn and Jack it could not offer that. It gave them rage, sadness and regret. The only thing that would give hem closure was to to see Sydney. Dead or alive.
  7. so she's technically MIA. hum... this could be fun to read.
    --mandy :angelic:
  8. aliaschick4mv

    aliaschick4mv Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    East Coast
    I like it. But one sentence a post is kinda weird. A paragraph or two at least. PLEASE
  9. spywolf

    spywolf Wicked Writer

    Feb 26, 2003
    East Coast, USA
    I agree with aliaschick4mv. But I also understand if you want to post something and that's all you can think of. Please post more soon, you ot my interest, so what's going to happen?
  10. sbmv12

    sbmv12 Rocket Ranger

    Apr 1, 2003
    please don't kill syd. please, please, please! :( Anyways post more soon. Thanks. :D
  11. aliasfreelancer

    aliasfreelancer Captain

    Mar 2, 2003
    Wow, this really has potential! But I agree with aliaschick4mv and Spywolf as well. Anywho, great fic! I'm already hooked, and I can't wait to find out what happens!
  12. vaughn_rox

    vaughn_rox Scout

    Mar 16, 2003
    thanx here's some more it's not much but it is more than two sentences.

    As the construction continues the three men all have one thing on their mind; the mission that had gone terribly wrong.
    *****************FLASHBACK- 2 years earlier************************

    Vaughn, Jack, Sydney, Weiss and Dixon are being issued their mission by Kendall.

    Kendall: We have received classified Intel telling us that a Rambaldi artifact is located in an abandoned church just outside of Asuncion, Paraguay.
    Sydney: What does the Rambaldi artifact do?
    Kendall: We do not know the purpose of the artifact but we do know that no matter what its purpose it won't be good for anyone if Sloane or Derevko get their hands on it.
    Vaughn: Do they know that there is an artifact in Paraguay?
    Kendall: No they still are unaware of the position of this artifact.
    Kendall: Here's your mission. Sydney you and Vaughn will go as a married couple on their second honeymoon. Jack and Weiss you two will have the same cover.
    Jack and Weiss: WHAT!!!!!!!
    Kendall: There is no other way to explain the way your gear is camouflaged then to say that you two are gay.
    Jack: This is ridiculous. I am not going to act gay.
    Weiss: If I have to be gay can I have Dixon as my mate.
    Dixon looks up confused.
    Kendall: No Agent Weiss you may not go with Dixon. In fact Dixon is not going to go on this mission; due to a recent tragedy Agent Dixon will be taking some time off.
    Jack: Kendall you ass I swear to god if you don't change my alias I am not going on this mission.
    Kendall: Agent Jack Bristow you will never speak to me like that again and the only other alias I could give you would be me. And trust me you do not want me to be your 'partner'.
    Jack sits back in his seat looking defeated.
    Kendall: Well Jack what's your decision?
    Weiss: Please don't leave me honey!
    Jack turns and gives Weiss the most pissed off face Weiss has ever seen. Weiss shuts up as Vaughn and Sydney try not to laugh.
    Vaughn to Sydney: I think Weiss and your father would make a cute couple.
    Jack: What was that Agent Vaughn?
    Vaughn: Um…well I was just saying that. You know what never mind it isn't important.
    Jack: Are you making fun of my situation?
    Vaughn: No sir it's just
    Kendall: Agent Vaughn seeing how you think this is amusing maybe I should make you and Jack a couple and Sydney can go with Weiss.
    Vaughn: No sir that won't be needed I know longer find Agent Weiss' relationship with Jack funny.
    Kendall: Good
    Vaughn: If anything I think it's cute.
    At that Sydney broke out laughing and had to be removed from the meeting because she couldn't stop.
    Kendall: Know that Agent Bristow has been escorted out I can finish explaining your mission. Agent Vaughn and Agent Bristow will be going as Tyler and Samantha Banks. Agent Weiss Frank Roberts and Jack will be Rodney Rice. All four of you will be in Paraguay for 3 days. You leave in 4 hours, any questions?
    Weiss: Jack do you mind if I call you Roddy instead of Rodney?
    Jack: YES I do mind. If I have it my way we'll be broken up by the time we leave.
    Kendall: That's enough you two go get your clothes and gear from op tech. Agent Vaughn go see if Agent Bristow has regained herself. Then inform her of her mission and go collect your stuff from op tech.

    Outside Vaughn finds Sydney sitting in car with a tear streaked face.
    Vaughn: O my god Sydney what's wrong?
    Sydney: Nothing it's just that I was laughing so hard I started to cry.
    Vaughn: I know I have to say this is really going to be a fun mission.
    Sydney: Anyway what's me name and when do we leave?
    Vaughn: You are Mrs. Samantha Banks and I am Mr. Tyler Banks and we leave in four hours.
    Sydney: Sounds great but what do we do until then?
    Vaughn: (with a sly smile on his face) I have a couple ideas.
    With that Sydney and Vaughn picked up their gear and drove over to Sydney's house.
    ####### 3 hours later ######

    Sydney unwraps Vaughn from around her and goes to answer the phone.
    Sydney: Hello
    Jack: Sydney come to the airport now!!
    Sydney: Why I still have a few minutes.
    Jack: Get here now!!
    With that Jack hung up.
    Sydney looked over at Vaughn
    Vaughn: Syd what's wrong?
    Sydney: I don't know my Dad just told me to get to the airport now. I think there might be something wrong with the flight. Are we flying with them?
    Vaughn: No we're on two different airlines.
    Sydney: I'm kind of worried can we go check it out?
    Vaughn: Ya of course I'll just grab our stuff.


    Vaughn and Sydney run into the airport frantically looking for Jack or Weiss
    Vaughn spots Weiss and grabs Sydney. When they reach Weiss they freeze.
    Sydney falls to the floor and starts to laugh uncontrollably, she looks up at Vaughn who is doing the same.
    Finally Vaughn manages to speak
    Vaughn: What is going on here?
    Weiss: Everyone on our flight is gay.
    Sydney: Are you serious?
    Weiss: Yes

    Vaughn, Weiss and Sydney turn back to see Jack still surrounded by men.

    Vaughn: So why aren't you in there?
    Weiss: They don't think I'm hot enough or gay enough. Even though I'm not gay it hurts.
    Sydney: Poor Weiss don't worry I think you're hot
    Weiss: Really
    Sydney: Ya
    Weiss: Can you prove it with a kiss?

    Sydney leans over and kisses Weiss on the cheek.
    Vaughn: Hey that’s enough.
    Weiss: Jealous?
    Vaughn: Ya, my wife is kissing a gay man. I want a kiss.
    Sydney: I can't kiss you now.
    Vaughn: Why not?
    Sydney: My Dad's right there.
    Vaughn: So tell him its part of your alias.
    Sydney: Look I'll kiss you on the plane, plus it's our second honeymoon so well you get what I'm saying right.
    Vaughn: Okay I understand.
    Weiss: This is so not fair you get Sydney and a night with here and I get Jack. I want some action.
    Vaughn: Hey you and Jack are on your honeymoon too something might just happen.
    Weiss and Sydney: EWWW

    Vaughn and Sydney leave to board their plane. The last thing the here is Weiss yelling.
    Weiss: You silly, silly men if you don't get your hands of my Roddy then there is going to be some major but kicking. Thank you for moving Roddy dear are you okay?
  13. lol rotflmao. hehe but what happened on the mission that went wrong?
    --mandy :angelic:
  14. FrEeLaNcEr03

    FrEeLaNcEr03 Rocket Ranger

    Mar 29, 2003


    I was laughing so hard my eyes were watering!!

    that was really good and i hope you write more soon!!!!lol
  15. kate_jones

    kate_jones Rocket Ranger

    Apr 10, 2003
    That was realy cute! I loved the conversation about the aliases. I could just picture the look on Jack's face! keep going.
  16. Addicted to Alias

    Addicted to Alias Rocket Ranger

    Apr 5, 2003
    LOL!!!!!!!!!! That was hilarious!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! JAck and Weiss gay, on their honeymoon :jack1: :sideroll: :joker: :lovers: LOLOLOLOLOLOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! OK, write more, this is great. I love it!!!!111
  17. kleverkitten

    kleverkitten Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    I think that's sooo sad about Syd.....and Jack acting gay?


    Yea...... :blink:
  18. *twinkletoes*

    *twinkletoes* Rocket Ranger

    Feb 27, 2003
    mel is sitting beside laughing her ass off. its funny to watch her....im laughing too tho....LOLLOLOLOLOL!!! that was sooooooooooo funny! just dont let syd die! hehe

    ems and mel
  19. beepbeep808

    beepbeep808 Captain

    Jan 22, 2003
    This is just to funny!(JAck and Weiss) I loved how you described the 'lost' star moment, I could see that happening! Please write more!
  20. Crawstinium

    Crawstinium Rocket Ranger

    Jan 15, 2003
    funny!! keep going please!

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