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Love and being pregnant

Discussion in 'Creative Writing & Arts' started by SarahBear, Jun 18, 2003.

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  1. SarahBear

    SarahBear Rocket Ranger

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    This is my first fic! Please tell me what you think!

    It was early Sat. morning and Sydney Vaughn had just woken up from a great sleep. She turned over and she didn't see Michael anywhere. She didn't smell breakfast either. :blink: Then she remembered that they had a very special dinner planed for that night. She remembered that he said he was gonna go fix up the spot they were going to. So she slowly got up and took down her hair from its braid to get into the shower. When she got back she put on a pair of Jean capree's(sp?) and a red tanktop. She curled her hair a little bit and put on a tiny bit of make-up. Then she really felt like a bowl of Fruity Pebbles so she went to the kitchen. When she got sat down and started eating Michael walked in. She swallowed the giant mouthful she took and went over to give him a kiss. "Mmmm.........fruitylicious!" he said. This made her laugh. She asked "Where have you been?"with a cute little dimpled smile on her face. "I went to make our spot perfect for tonight!" "Can you please tell me where wer'e gonna go?" she pleaded. "Nadda! You'll just have to wait and seeeeeee!" She wanted to know SO bad! She knew a way to get it out of him! She walked over and gave him a little kiss on his nose, then his cheek, then started kissing his neck. "Will you.....please......tell.......me.....now? she asked in between kisses. He couldn't stand it, "OK OK OK! we're going to the pier. I found a spot where we can sit under the stars on a blanket and be together. You'll love it!" "I love you!"she said. "I love you too!"he replied. "So, whatcha wanna do today?"she asked? "Hmmm........"he thought while looking up and rubbing his chin. Then he picked her up and ran to the bedroom all the while her laughing and screaming,"MICHAEL!!!!!!!!"(you can guess what happens next.) They were in there about an hour and a half when they both got dressed again and went out to eat together. They enjoyed a nice meal at Pizza Hut(well, as nice as it gets there anyway!) Then they went home and watched a movie. She fell asleep on him. "How on earth did i get lucky enough to marry this amazing woman?!"he thought."She's SO goregeous and loving and sweet and funny and a sexy kick ass chick too!"I love her more than anyhing in the entire world he thought, before he too, drifted off to sleep.

    Sorry so short! Please tell me what you think, like if i should keep goin or not! luv, sarah
     
  2. vaughn.rocks.my.world17

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    this story has a great basis to work from. Keep it up and see where it goes.
     
  3. SarahBear

    SarahBear Rocket Ranger

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    Thank you, i might keep goin, just depends on what others think!
     
  4. pennstatechic

    pennstatechic Rocket Ranger

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    It's so cute, and very interesting. You already have a thing for writing great Syd and Vaughn scene's. Post more soon, can't wait to find out what you have planned next. Great story (y)

    Lauren :angelic:
     
  5. nice start. maybe it can be a tiny bit more descriptive, but everything else is great.
    --Mandy :angelic:
     
  6. *SPYnish*

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    It´s Interesting, More Plaseee


    ~Natalia~
     
  7. vaughnobsessed

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    Excellent start! Keep going!
     
  8. Ames47

    Ames47 Amy Strikes Back

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    i like it!! its a great start!! hope you have more soon!!
     
  9. SarahBear

    SarahBear Rocket Ranger

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    Thanks guys! im so glad you like it! But 1 question, its stupid but, how do i get back into the same topic to write more?!
     
  10. Aliasgirl47

    Aliasgirl47 Rocket Ranger

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    very good job! continue!

    just get into that topic, and post more as if you would a reply!
     
  11. SydVaughn1001

    SydVaughn1001 Rocket Ranger

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    This is cute so far - can't wait to see where you go with it!
     
  12. SarahBear

    SarahBear Rocket Ranger

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    Thankyou! lol
     
  13. kate_jones

    kate_jones Rocket Ranger

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    That was cute. It would be easier to read if you broke it up, though. Just like this:
    "hi" said Syd.
    "what?" asked Vaughn.
    "hi!" yelled Syd. The she...blah blah blah.

    Anyway, it was very good. I hope you write more soon.
    ~kate
     
  14. Vaughn4ever

    Vaughn4ever Rocket Ranger

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    I really like the way this story is starting. It's really cute and sweet. Please Post More Soon
     
  15. liliana

    liliana Rocket Ranger

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    you didn't even get a welcome from this lot.Welcome to AA and welcome to the wonderful world of Romance Fiction I'm Lili.this story is starting out great I love it I like S/V romances
     
  16. aliasjunkie4ever

    aliasjunkie4ever Rocket Ranger

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    Hehe aww how cute :P I really like this. Please continue!
     
  17. dutch sydney bristow

    dutch sydney bristow Rocket Ranger

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    It looks good so far, this could become very good I think!
    just keep writing, an I'll keep reading and reacting!

    maartje
     
  18. Alias_luver33

    Alias_luver33 Rocket Ranger

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    :D Aawww!! This is soooo cute!! Oh, and welcome to AllAlias! Nice to have you here! :) Please continue with the story! It's great!

    ~Shammi~
     
  19. ILuvMichael

    ILuvMichael Rocket Ranger

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    that was very interesting, and cute...

    write more soon, please
     
  20. Ms.MichaelVaughn

    Ms.MichaelVaughn Rocket Ranger

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    This is such a sweet story...I love it!!! :D :woot:
    I hope you'll update soon ;)
     

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