its got potential, i think it needs more depth, and better colors, there is also a lot of deadspace on the right hand side, and mixed with that black green gradient map just doesnt look good. nice job overall, i do like how you used the c4ds
yep. it has lotsa potential. i would add some texture stocks to it, and maybe a few clip masks. also, there's one thing that makes every single video game sig better, gradient maps