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Making Up For Two Missed Years

Discussion in 'Creative Writing & Arts' started by BornToBeWild, May 26, 2003.

  1. BornToBeWild

    BornToBeWild Rocket Ranger

    May 17, 2003
    Tell me what you think. None of the characters are mine. nor the first to spoken lines.

    Chapter One: The Ring

    "Why are you wearing that ring?" Sydney asked in a soft voice. She was afraid to know the answer.

    "Syd, we thought you were dead ... you've been missing for almost two years."


    "When I dropped you off at your house, the night I told you about Santa Barbara that was two years ago. The next day when you didn't show up for the debrief Dixon and I drove to your house to look for you. Your apartment was wrecked. We searched the whole apartment after about five minutes Dixon found Will in the bathroom. You aprtment had blood in every room but especially your bedroom. Will was taken to a CIA hospital and a forensic team searche dyour apartment. FOr a while it seemed like Will was going to die but then his conditions became stable. After a month in a coma, Will finally awoke. He told us everything about Francie really being A. G. Doren, and the message he left on your cell phone.
    "Two weeks after that fatal night we recieved the forensic report for your apartment. The blood in the house was a mixture of yours and A. G. Dorens, and in the bathroom's Wills. In the bed room fingerprints were found on two guns and three bullet cartiges and a guy were found next to a stain of blood that was discovered to be yours." Vaughn paused and looked up at Sydney, "Syd ... we searched for a year. Then, Kendal declared you MIA. There were no leads. The forensic teams didn't find any thing from whom ever took you and Francie. Six months later Jack, Will and I were still searching, Kendal annouced you dead and ordered us to stop looking for you at the risk of our jobs. So, I left. I'd had enough of the spy life. Jacl and will stayed but that doesn't mean they stopped looking. Every night after work they'd go back to Jack's and search for you. No lead were found. Not a trace. None of your Alias ... nothing. Will and Jack are really clase now. They're always together looking.
    " When you called Kendal from Hong Kong he almost smiled. They asked me to come back to find you. I almost didn't come. I didn't think it was real. I din't think you were real but when I walked in the door I knew it was you."

    Sydney just starred at Vaughn, "You left?' Then Sydney looked at Vaughn's hand, " You never answered my question; Why are you wearing that ring?" Sydney stated even though the answer was obvious.


    A door opens and Sydney walks into a swankly furnished passenger roo, of a CIA provatte jet, closely followed by Vaughn. Sydney brought up the topic of vaughn's ring again>

    " You still haven't answered my question"


    " You never answered my question. Why are you whereing that ring?"

    Just then the door opened.

    "Agent Vaughn, the plane is ready."

    " Thank you we'll be right there."

    Vaughn looked at Sydney, she tried to smile, failed and followed Vaughn out the door.

    ~*~*~*~*~ End Flash ~*~*~*~*~

    Vaughn looked down at the ring on his finger and up at Sydney, wondering what to say.

    " After I left, I didnt know what to do. At least while I was looking for you I was doing somehting. And being out of the Cia and not having connections like you father I couldn't continue to search on my own. I rented my house out and flew to Santa Barbara. After two weeks there I met Clare Letora. claire was from LA too. Three weeks later, i moved back to LA and the renters of my house moved out. Two months after that Claire told me she was an analyst for the NSA. I told her about the Cia and about losing my father and you. She understood. A month ago I married Claire. It was a smalloutdoors wedding." Vaughn paused before continueing," Syd, my life was ruined when I lost you. Claire helped me regain control and I love her for that."

    Sydney rose and ran from the room holding back tears.

  2. mer_vaughn

    mer_vaughn Rocket Ranger

    Mar 13, 2003
    Sacramento, California
    Aww. Really cute. I hope Syd forgives him and Vaughn and Syd get back together.
  3. ariesgirly2lovesMV

    ariesgirly2lovesMV Rocket Ranger

    May 5, 2003
    this is really good!!

    please PM me when you post the next chapter (y) :D :cool: :)
  4. Xtremelimits08

    Xtremelimits08 Rocket Ranger

    Apr 19, 2003
    this is good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!can u pm me too please!!!!!
  5. kate_jones

    kate_jones Rocket Ranger

    Apr 10, 2003
    That's a great start BornToBeWild! From what I can tell from this first bit, you're a very good writer. I can't wait until your next post! Good job!
  6. allie

    allie Rocket Ranger

    Mar 21, 2003
    i liked the 1st part and i cant wait 4 more!!
  7. Aliasfan23

    Aliasfan23 Rocket Ranger

    Mar 4, 2003
    Aww poor Syd! Vaughn's just stupid! Lose the girl! Get back Sydney, duh!
  8. Ames47

    Ames47 Amy Strikes Back

    Mar 31, 2003
    the outskirts of HELL
    aww this is a good start!! hmm.... cant wait to see what happens b/t s&v!!
  9. Crawstinium

    Crawstinium Rocket Ranger

    Jan 15, 2003
    yes, definitely a good start! :D it makes sense when you explain it like like that - "Claire helped me regain control"
    great job! :)
  10. Ms.MichaelVaughn

    Ms.MichaelVaughn Rocket Ranger

    Mar 11, 2003
    that was really great (y) :D (y)
    I really want to know how this is going to end :)
    Hope you'll update soon :cool:
  11. aliasjunkie4ever

    aliasjunkie4ever Rocket Ranger

    May 5, 2003
    This is good :)

    Can I make a suggestion? It really makes a difference when you punctuate properly and stuff. Otherwise its hard to read and it creates run on sentences and stuff. But, just a thought.

    I hope you get more soon! I really like this! :)
  12. feeling_like_a_spy

    feeling_like_a_spy Rocket Ranger

    May 9, 2003
    i like this fic... seems realistic! :D
  13. BornToBeWild

    BornToBeWild Rocket Ranger

    May 17, 2003
    Thanks everyone. i plan to write the next chapter in study hall tomorrow. So hopefull y it will be up after school. If you want i can pm everbody when the next charpters. Sound good?
  14. Kristina

    Kristina Rocket Ranger

    Feb 28, 2003
    Cool, can't wait.
  15. totally4alias10

    totally4alias10 Rocket Ranger

    Mar 22, 2003
    That is a really good start!! Post more soon!!
  16. Syd_Vaughn4ever

    Syd_Vaughn4ever Rocket Ranger

    Mar 9, 2003
    Poor syd...that insentive jerk!How could he??
  17. IrinauSa

    IrinauSa Captain

    May 10, 2003
    Nice. I like it. :cheers: :jawdrop: :syd1:
  18. aliasjgfanaticmv

    aliasjgfanaticmv Rocket Ranger

    Jan 9, 2003
    shouldn't matter to you where I live
    this is very good! I'd love to have a PM for your story when you get another chapter up, otherwise I'll probably never read it again since I don't come in here often anymore....and I'd like to see what happens ^_^ so....PM me please? :)
  19. krzykty57789

    krzykty57789 Rocket Ranger

    May 7, 2003
    i agree with Syd_Vaughn4ever he is a jerk..sydney is tough he shoulda known she would make it back
  20. BornToBeWild

    BornToBeWild Rocket Ranger

    May 17, 2003
    I wrote about half of the second chapter today in school. Do u want me to put up what i have and add more later? or just wait?

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