Fishi
attempting author
I am planning on writing a story and I need a little bit of assistance. You see my friends are not very sci-fi savy (at least that I know of) and I need to know what I should do to grab their attention really fast.
Another problem I am having with my story is an inability to find the right words to describe the technology that the main character creates.
The technology is designed to work like a computer ten thousand times more powerful than the most powerful super computer we have today, along with the capabilities to bring video games to life (much the way a Starfleet Holodeck does) with safety protocols that take major amounts of hacking to turn off so no one gets hurt. It is styled to look like a pair of glasses/goggles (choice of the consumer), a wrist gauntlet (not sure if that is the right word, I got the idea from a wrist brace that I was wearing for no other reason than I could), and biker gloves (the kind with half fingers, if you know what I mean.) It is all controlled through the gloves and gauntlet and the glasses/goggles are for when you want(or need) to keep your internet/computing secret. it is all regulated through a device much like a starfleet com badge . or later on a device much like seven of nine's borg implant above her right eyeborg. Currently in the story only the main character, a fifteen year old girl, has access to both.
There is no limit to the amount of information this technology can hold. It can be programmed to play any game from any system from the very first video games to the latest and greatest and beyond.
So can anyone please help me:
1. Write it so my friends will actually read it.
and
2. Describe the technology in a shorter way than what I just did.
edit: I also need ideas for characters. so far I only have four The Main Character, Her name is Somnia (which is Latin for dreams); her friends, Joseph(Jo-Jo) and Alexandra (Alex or Fish); and the main character's mom, Carol; make that five characters,and a school bully, Jamie, who is so mean I need a new word to describe her. They are all human.
Any help will be much appreciated.
Another problem I am having with my story is an inability to find the right words to describe the technology that the main character creates.
The technology is designed to work like a computer ten thousand times more powerful than the most powerful super computer we have today, along with the capabilities to bring video games to life (much the way a Starfleet Holodeck does) with safety protocols that take major amounts of hacking to turn off so no one gets hurt. It is styled to look like a pair of glasses/goggles (choice of the consumer), a wrist gauntlet (not sure if that is the right word, I got the idea from a wrist brace that I was wearing for no other reason than I could), and biker gloves (the kind with half fingers, if you know what I mean.) It is all controlled through the gloves and gauntlet and the glasses/goggles are for when you want(or need) to keep your internet/computing secret. it is all regulated through a device much like a starfleet com badge . or later on a device much like seven of nine's borg implant above her right eyeborg. Currently in the story only the main character, a fifteen year old girl, has access to both.
There is no limit to the amount of information this technology can hold. It can be programmed to play any game from any system from the very first video games to the latest and greatest and beyond.
So can anyone please help me:
1. Write it so my friends will actually read it.
and
2. Describe the technology in a shorter way than what I just did.
edit: I also need ideas for characters. so far I only have four The Main Character, Her name is Somnia (which is Latin for dreams); her friends, Joseph(Jo-Jo) and Alexandra (Alex or Fish); and the main character's mom, Carol; make that five characters,and a school bully, Jamie, who is so mean I need a new word to describe her. They are all human.
Any help will be much appreciated.