Troll Alert Hello everyone. I'm new to the forum, and would like feedback on my logline. Please be gentle (jk) Extraordinary boy angel, thought to be the last of his kind, struggles to train at an elite academy when he discovers his destiny in a forbidden city. A log line is a brief, one sentence summary of a film, Tv show of a script. Still working on a couple of taglines: 1.) What happens to the world if a star declares war? The synopsis has spoilers, so I can't post at this time.:p Thank You Skwirlinator, very, very helpful feedback! How about this: A boy angel trains at an elite trains at an elite academy to stop the creation of a revolutionary master race.?? ...of course in the synopsis, it details why angels are separated by gender; why angels are, as most considered stars in the vast universe are revealed. Sorry for the typo A boy angel trains at an elite academy to stop the creation of a revolutionary master race. ... Like the adolescent one! Thx Tim. I'm going to work on this more. Ok, here's my revised logline: Extraordinary teen angel sets out on a quest to a forbidden city to stop the creation of a revolutionary master race. Thx Tim. Greatly appreciated! @Wolfrunner: Yes that's the stars I'm referring to - imagine, there are roughly 400 million stars in our massive galaxy; the privileged stars govern solar systems with life supporting planets. One goes rogue and destroys its systems, no biggie – the circle of life scenario. But when one plots to destroy and conquer the universe... I'm also working with this one too, A son of fire shall never bow before sons of clay. @Tim, That sounds enticing. A blog to totally geek out on! Also, I've tweeked my logline a bit more. Please let me know your feeback. In a society where angels are considered criminal, a teen angel sets out on a quest to a forbidden city to stop the creation of a revolutionary master race.