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Sark's Capturing

Discussion in 'General' started by sark's girl, May 24, 2003.

  1. sark's girl

    sark's girl Rocket Ranger

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    i know this isn't much but i'm gonna add more 2 it.

    This is my 1st fic so re: and tell me what u think.

    "You know Micheal, we really shouldn't let Gracie go out by herself." Syd said sounding worried. "What's one time going to make a difference of?" Micheal responded."Fine."Syd said.

    Gracie walked along the hard pavement on her way home. Suddenly, a silver sportscar pulled up next to her. There was a young man looking not a day older than 22 with blond hair, and blue eyes.He pulled out a gun and pionted it to her head. "Get in the car". he said sounding calm, as if he was doing nothing wrong. She slowly raised her hands were he could see them and got in. He started speeding along the highway not giving her a second glance.She wondered were she was going ,but decided to keep quiet and that she would find out soon enough.

    About an hour later they arrived at a building, "Get out ." he said. She got out of the shiny looking car and he grabbed her shoulders putting her infront of him guiding her into the building and soon room by room. They finally reached a cellar with shackles.He started with her feet but then realizing she could escape punched him in the lip. Responding to her he punched her in the stomach. It was a cold, hard punch that made tears swell up in her eyes, but he finished putting her in the shackles and left giving her a cold stare.

    Suddenly, she felt sick and before she knew it she was couhging up blood! Then she remembered something. She had Bobby pins in her hair so she reached for one and started picking the lock. Finally she was free but how could she leave without getting caught? She decided she would have to remember how she came in and think backwards to get out.So, she burst out the door and was in what looked like the main hall. There were four paths, which way should she go? Suddenly, she got that feeling again as she was coughing and collapsed. She heard someone coming, she tried to see who it was but couldn't pick her head up to see. She felt tired so she tried not to fall asleep but it was no use. Even with the coughing and blood stains on the floor she fell asleep.

    Morning
    She woke up to find herself back in shackles. She groaned inwardly. The man stepped into the room, " That was some stunt you tried to pull last night. If I hadn't of been walking down the hall, you would have been dead." he told her with a cold stare. "If it wasn't for you I would be home now." she said.

    Well, that's all I can think of. TELL ME WHAT U THINK!!!
     
  2. smegheadalways

    smegheadalways Rocket Ranger

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    That was good, one question though how old is Syd's daughter? :D
     
  3. sark's girl

    sark's girl Rocket Ranger

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    i don't know. ohhhhhhhhh.................. probably 11-13
     
  4. smegheadalways

    smegheadalways Rocket Ranger

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    So.......go on write more! :P
     
  5. sark's girl

    sark's girl Rocket Ranger

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    :shamefullyembarrased: thanks!!! :shamefullyembarrased: i'll think of more to night! :shamefullyembarrased:
     
  6. TephieD

    TephieD Rocket Ranger

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    Keep going with this! It's good!
     
  7. nancee

    nancee Rocket Ranger

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    o0o0o thats a good one
     
  8. sydney_alias_vaughn

    sydney_alias_vaughn Rocket Ranger

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    Keep going, this storyis great, post more as soon as possible
     
  9. SD6Agent24

    SD6Agent24 Rocket Ranger

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    this story is awesome you gotta post more!!! if you don't mind could u PM when you get more, Thanx!!
     
  10. sark's girl

    sark's girl Rocket Ranger

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    i did write more, it's called The Antidote. ^_^
     
  11. SD6Agent24

    SD6Agent24 Rocket Ranger

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    ok thanx!! I'll check that out
     
  12. *SPYnish*

    *SPYnish* Rocket Ranger

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    It´s Good, Continue pleaseee :LOL:

    ~Natalia~
     

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