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The Story Begins..

Discussion in 'Creative Writing & Arts' started by Aliasfan23, Apr 13, 2003.

  1. Aliasfan23

    Aliasfan23 Rocket Ranger

    Mar 4, 2003
    Hey guys- I got another fanfic. I'm going to post in scene by scene. You'll figure out what I'm saying, evnetually. PLEASE R/R!! Thanks. Some will be longer than others. Oh and if I get enogh reviews today, then I will post more of them. The next two scenes is fluff.
    Scene: Diane’s funeral. Everyone is there.
    Dixon- I want to find out who did this. My guess is Sloane.
    Vaughn-We aren’t sure yet. The only thing we are sure of is the detonation. It was C-4 attached to the car and was a remote detonation.
    Sydney- Dixon, are you going to be okay?
    Dixon- Yes. I have to go now. I have to go get the kids.
    Sydney- Well call if you need anything.
    Vaughn- Syd, are you ready?
    Sydney- Yea
  2. Alias_Gay

    Alias_Gay Rocket Ranger

    Jan 27, 2003
    Whats she readying for?

    Pls. give me more!
  3. Alias Elle

    Alias Elle Rocket Ranger

    Dec 1, 2002
    Los Angeles, CA
    that was... short. It's going to be interesting, though.

    ~Me :angel2:
  4. Aliasfan23

    Aliasfan23 Rocket Ranger

    Mar 4, 2003
    just that scene is short
  5. aliaschick4mv

    aliaschick4mv Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    East Coast
    Hmmm... sounds like it should be good! Just post more soon please!
  6. bluheart13

    bluheart13 Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    ok. short but good.
  7. Aliasfan23

    Aliasfan23 Rocket Ranger

    Mar 4, 2003
    new update! Yay for you!! LOL. Here goes. This one is longer. Syd/ Vaughn fluff!
    Scene: Vaughn’s Car. Vaughn is driving.
    Vaughn- It’s a surprise.
    Sydney- Vaughn, you know that I’m a spy FOR the CIA and that because I am, I hate surprises but you are giving me one anyway?
    Vaughn- This one I think you’ll like.
    Sydney- Well where are we going?
    Vaughn- That’s half the surprise
    (A few minutes of silence)
    Sydney- You’re taking me to a GROCERY store?
    Vaughn- No, I have to get something so we can be prepared for where we are going because if we don’t have what I have to get then it would be a bad idea to go where we are going if we don’t have what I have to get. Stay here. Close your eyes.
    Sydney- You’re telling a SPY to close their eyes, you know that, right?
    Vaughn- Yes, I know. I will be right back. Keep your eyes closed.
    Sydney- How about I close them when you come out so that I can be fully aware of my surroundings?
    Vaughn- Alright
    (Vaughn gets out and goes into the store. A few minutes later, he comes back with the stuff. Sydney closes her eyes. Vaughn puts the stuff in the back seat.)
    Vaughn- Okay, you can open them now.
    Sydney- Now can you tell me where we are going?
    Vaughn- to the surprise
    Sydney- (starts to dig through her purse) Vaughn, where’s my cell? And my pager?
    Vaughn- Weiss.
    Sydney- What if they page me?
    Vaughn- Weiss can call me or come get us, he knows where we are going.
    Sydney- What if Francie calls?
    Vaughn- Then you’ll have to get back to her.
    Sydney- So, Where are we going?
    Vaughn- I can’t tell you. That would ruin the surprise.
    (Not long after)
    Okay, you don’t have to wait any longer, we’re here.
    Sydney- Vaughn, why are we at the park?
    Vaughn- I remember you said something about people playing in the park in the middle of the day. We are going to be one of those people, only we are having a picnic.
    Sydney- So that’s why you went to the store, to get the food.
    Vaughn- Okay, let’s eat.
    Sydney- Okay.
  8. mer_vaughn

    mer_vaughn Rocket Ranger

    Mar 13, 2003
    Sacramento, California
    That's really cute! I like only reading it scene by scene. It adds to the suspense. You said the next TWO scenes were fluff. What happens next? I can't wait! :P
  9. Chanel

    Chanel Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    i love it!!!!! please post more! its so cute! and i like the scene by scene1 very cool!
  10. AliasFan4eva

    AliasFan4eva Rocket Ranger

    Dec 18, 2002
    Hey Great Job!
  11. nancee

    nancee Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    from da hood
    awwww sweet
  12. btvaughn

    btvaughn Rocket Ranger

    Dec 7, 2002
    I'm waiting on something really sweet to happen! I like it so far....please post more soon! :D
  13. kleverkitten

    kleverkitten Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    This is interesting so far....I wanna see where it goes from here.
  14. Kristina

    Kristina Rocket Ranger

    Feb 28, 2003
    I like it so far, post more soon! :D
  15. AliasFan4eva

    AliasFan4eva Rocket Ranger

    Dec 18, 2002
    Yay! Write more! I love the picnic idea! It's so cute!
  16. Aliasfan23

    Aliasfan23 Rocket Ranger

    Mar 4, 2003
    Hey all-- here is my last chapter of fluff for a while. I have 1 1/2 more scenes done but I won't post them until tommorow or Wednesday to buy somemore time to finish the chaps. lol ok well here goes[/COLOR]~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

    Scene: Los Angeles Park. Sydney and Vaughn are laying together on a blanket. They have finished lunch.
    Vaughn- If you could go anywhere right now, where would you go?
    Sydney- What are the conditions?
    Vaughn- What ever you want them to be.
    Sydney- Okay (thinks for a minute) You and I are there. We’re in the Bahamas at a resort, on our honeymoon.
    Vaughn- You’ve thought about our honeymoon?
    Sydney- Yeah, why, haven’t you?
    Vaughn- Yeah
    Sydney- What did you think about?
    Vaughn- Going to France or Italy, or on a cruise, or staying in a cabin in the mountains
    Sydney- I love those ideas.
    Vaughn- What else have you thought about?
    Sydney- Meeting your mom. I’ve never met her, and I’m really nervous.
    Vaughn- Why? She’s going to love you.
    Sydney- How can you be so sure?
    Vaughn- Because she told me. Her exact words were ‘If you love even the worst person like your father’s killer’s daughter, then I will try my hardest to love her, too.’ You are nothing like your mother, with the exception of being a good spy and some of your looks, which I’m not complaining about, so it would be impossible for her not to love you. (Sydney kisses him, short but passionate kiss)
    Vaughn- What was that for?
    Sydney- For making me feel better, like always.
    (Vaughn’s pager goes off)
    Sydney- Weiss?
    Vaughn- (irritated) Alice.
    Sydney- What’s Alice paging you for?
    Vaughn- She’s been trying to convince me that me and you aren’t meant to be and that me and her are.
    Sydney- What’d you tell her?
    Vaughn- The truth, I didn’t love her anymore, I love you. You and I are meant to be, not her and me.
    (Vaughn’s cell rings)
    Sydney- Who is that?
    Vaughn- Weiss (answers) hello
    Weiss- You still with Sydney?
    Vaughn- Uh, yea, why?
    Weiss- Jack said get in here now.
    Vaughn- Okay, we’ll be there in about 10 min.( Hangs up) Jack wants us in.
    Sydney- Weiss say what’s up?
    Vaughn- No, he just said get in there. (Starts to clean up)
  17. Aliaswannabe2

    Aliaswannabe2 Captain

    Jan 3, 2003
    This is great! Post more soon please!!!
  18. Ames47

    Ames47 Amy Strikes Back

    Mar 31, 2003
    the outskirts of HELL
    thats really good!!!! ugh alice!!! she has to ruin everything!! i love the part about their honeymoons!!! keep goin!!! :D
  19. Mrs. Karie Vartan

    Mrs. Karie Vartan Rocket Ranger

    Apr 4, 2003
    :kissme: Awww!! Very sweet....Why can't I have a Vaughn of my very own?? :( :P
  20. Aliaswannabe2

    Aliaswannabe2 Captain

    Jan 3, 2003
    I just got a PM, but I don't see a new chap..hmmmm.....

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