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stella1

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This is my first fan fic, feedback please!

Many parts
Disclaimer: all characters are owned by JJ Abrams
Rating:G
Sydney is pregnant and Vaughn is under investigation.


I had just woken up from an induced coma that lasted two weeks, so I was a little over seven weeks pregnant and starting to show. Vaughn was detained for espionage and he had very bad injuries from the accident. I was devastated Vaugh, the clean cut Boy Scout, an enemy spy? My father walked in and told me this. So, I took a deep breath and said,

"Dad, vaughn and I, we're having a baby"
I had no idea how he would react. I was terribly afraid of being told that Vaughn wasn't good enough for me and how disgraceful it was to have a child out of wedlock.

"Sydney, I'm happy for you, but the doctors told me a couple of weeks ago" he said quite awkwardly. I was so happy the burden wasn't on me to tell the news to everyone that I was pregnant with a possible traitors' child. "Vaughn is out on bail and he is here."

I was elated, I had hoped to see his green eyes looking at me telling me he didn't do it, it was all a lie."Send him in please" I asked, all to quickly. Vaughn came in, his face with no expression. My dad left, and Vaughn sat down next to the bed. He said "Syd, I don't know what to say. I'm so sorry. I started working with your mother before I knew she killed my father. After I found out, she threated me to make me keep working with her. She paid me to get you in the CIA, to make sure you were in Taipei that night she shot you." I sat there thinking that my childs' father worked for the KGB. I couldn't stand to think of it. "Syd,I know that you are pregnant and I couldn't be happier, and I know you are mad, but I severed all ties with Irina after you "died". I thought she killed the woman I loved and her own daughter" I was infuriated "The woman you love is the one you set up to get shot?"I didn't want him near me but I wanted him to hold me. I loved him more than anything and hated him at the same time.

"Syd, please don't do this I love you, you are pregnant with my child, I cannot express how sorry I am."

"Vaughn I love you, but you just have to go. I can't have you here right now."

The second it came out of my mouth I regretted it. I needed him, I still loved him.
He stood up with out a word and left the room. "Vaughn", I called to him, he ignored me.

The doctor came in and said "Ms. Bristow, we have your ultrasound pictures here, and you are having twin girls!"

I know its not great but please tell me how I can improve it.

Thanks!
 
Hey,

I just read this and I have to say that it's defenately not bad for a first fan fic :smiley:
The story sounds good but I think you need to work it out a bit more.
But somehow I know it will work itself out once you really get into writing this.
I'd love to know how this goes on so please put me on your pm list okay?
Thanks :D

--Trish--

P.S: good luck with writing
 
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Chapter Two

Sydney was released from the hospital. But, they didn't know how psychologically damaged she was. A traitor as a husband, pregnant with his twins, and her sister in a coma. She went home and sat thinking of Vaughn

"There was never a clue," she thought

"But, before I disappeared, he was under investigation for investigating my mother"

It didn't add up Sydney no longer knew what to think. Just then the door rang. Eric Weiss was there. He found out about Sydney’s' pregnancy through the CIA. He knew how depressed she would be. He came in to a morose Sydney.

"Come on Syd, he might not be guilty, the CIA could have been wrong." he said, foolishly not knowing he had confessed to her.

“He told me Eric, he said it was true. I hate him for it, but I need him. I can't raise twins by myself!" She started to cry for the first time since she found out the truth.

Eric sat next to her, rubbing her back, not knowing what to say next.

"Nadia is showing increased brain function, she might wake up soon." Sydney showed no response to this, she was too caught up in her own emotions.

"Do you want to talk about it?” Eric said gently, trying to coax something out of her.

"No." Sydney replied quietly, leaning on his shoulder. He put his arm around her.

Vaughn was at his apartment. He was thinking of what kind of pain Sydney was going through. Being pregnant with his child (He hadn't been in contact with anyone, he didn't know about the twins) and finding out he had ties to the KGB. She had already gone through so much in her life. He hated to put her through more.

That’s why he didn’t tell her everything.
 
Great chapter! Pleassssssssssssse add more and make the chapters a little longer. Great fic. Poor Sydney. I hope that Vaughn finds out that she is having twins.

texasalias
 
this is a very great!! i only have one suggestion. if you update it everyday the fic starts to run out of ideas, and you have writers block. i update mine about every week so i can keep it new and fresh. my first fic i updated everyday and worked myself into a hole. which is why i am not writing in it anymore. anyways, never mind i confused myself trying to explain. please pm me whe you update.
you can call me bug. it is my nickname for some reason. i don't even know why. :blink: anyways i am going to go eat some candy :jump: !!!
 
Very good part :smiley:
You might want to make the chapters longer though but as for the rest, it was all good.
I can't wait to see what he hasn't told her.
Please update soon
 
I had a really good idea so I had update today (sorry bug)!

"The extraction plan was, immaculate what the hell did you do Olivia?"

"I followed exactly what you told me sir, the car was to crumpled to get him out, I had to leave, or the CIA would find me and compromise our operation!”

“It was you not me Arvin, who compromised this operation, I hit the car in the right spot, you said, they would be unconscious” Immediately after Olivia said this, she knew Sloane would be furious.

“Olivia, stop! All that matters is Irina told us to get Vaughn out, so we have to get him out. He knows by now that we tried to extract him, he will take some precautions and might have told Sydney of his true affiliations.”

“Let’s kill him, as revenge for my daughter’s death.”

“You know we can’t do that, the CIA and APO could trace it to us, even if I try to throw them off. We have to extract Vaughn from Operation: 47”

Sydney’s Apartment

Sydney was on her couch, curled up reading Tolstoy. Eric Weiss had recently moved in with a cured Nadia. Nadia and Eric walked in and saw her reading with one hand protectively over her ever-expanding stomach she was into her fifth month of pregnancy and on maternity leave.

“Do you want to go bowling?” Eric suggested to Nadia.

Nadia was casting Sydney a somber gaze from another room.

“No, I feel so bad leaving her here alone, what if she needs something?”

“Well, we could stay here and drink.”

“Eric, if you had to go for nine months without alcohol, would you want someone drinking in front of you?”

Just then the phone rang. Sydney tried to get up, but Nadia ran over and told her she would get it. As Nadia answered, her skin grew pale and hung up.

“Syd, I’m sorry but Vaughn is missing.”

Sloane was at his his desk, waiting for Vaughn to arrive. As he came in he said,

"Hello, Mr. Michaux"

Vaughn didn't reply.

He stopped responding to that name seven years ago, when the operation started with the assasination of Danny.
 
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