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since a couple have requested I post this . . . and because we have a re-run tonight . . .
<span style='font-size:14pt;line-height:100%'>The Flour Moth</span>
By the author known as verdantheart on this forum
Disclaimer: This work is based on characters from the television series Alias, characters and concept © 2001 - 2003 JJ Abrams/ABC. Please contact the author before republishing this work in any form.
“Precious Pain” © Melissa Ethridge 1987. Permission for use not requested at this time.
A few words about this story:
This story is a writer’s exercise based on ideas that continued to interest me in the fall of 2002. I typically resist writing “fanfic,” but I thought it would be a good opportunity to work on dialog and action--I’m typically stronger on description (the sort of thing they tell you to dispense with these days, alas!). I began writing this story around Christmas 2002 and finished polishing on February 25, 2003.
The story is basically a character study of Jack from his POV and ponders his level of despair during the time between the “death” of his wife and the time when Sydney discovered he was an agent. The structure is a little unusual in that it is based at a time during Sydney’s tenure as an unknowing SD-6 agent alternating with flashbacks to a time just after Jack returned from prison. A few notes:
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<span style='font-size:14pt;line-height:100%'>The Flour Moth</span>
By the author known as verdantheart on this forum
Disclaimer: This work is based on characters from the television series Alias, characters and concept © 2001 - 2003 JJ Abrams/ABC. Please contact the author before republishing this work in any form.
“Precious Pain” © Melissa Ethridge 1987. Permission for use not requested at this time.
A few words about this story:
This story is a writer’s exercise based on ideas that continued to interest me in the fall of 2002. I typically resist writing “fanfic,” but I thought it would be a good opportunity to work on dialog and action--I’m typically stronger on description (the sort of thing they tell you to dispense with these days, alas!). I began writing this story around Christmas 2002 and finished polishing on February 25, 2003.
The story is basically a character study of Jack from his POV and ponders his level of despair during the time between the “death” of his wife and the time when Sydney discovered he was an agent. The structure is a little unusual in that it is based at a time during Sydney’s tenure as an unknowing SD-6 agent alternating with flashbacks to a time just after Jack returned from prison. A few notes:
- Don’t expect the usual surprises you’d find in Alias; it’s not that kind of story.
- The McGuffin is a Rambaldi-like object. We now know that Rambaldi goes back a lot further with Sloane and Jack--I thought this might be a problem.
- I used Devlin, although he might not have been senior enough at the time to have been in charge of the operation I put him in charge of--but maybe he could have been. I tried to discover his first name, but failed, so I named him George, after Jack Bauer’s boss George Mason in 24 (RIP). I also named Cretchner Al.
- Sloane probably left the CIA for more than just the reason stated, but hey.
- I thought the use of “Precious Pain” was perhaps over the top, but I couldn’t resist and I think it worked out pretty well.
- Vaughnoholics beware, Vaughn doesn’t appear in this story because it occurs before either Jack or Sydney met him.
- If you’re looking for a happy story, this isn’t it (“ponders his level of despair” probably clued you in on that . . .).
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