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  1. Kristina

    Kristina Rocket Ranger

    Feb 28, 2003
    Disclaimer: “I don’t own any of these characters or anything related to ALIAS.”

    <span style='font-size:21pt;line-height:100%'>NOTE: THIS IS THE OLD VERSION!!!! GO TO PAGE 8, I REPEAT PAGE 8! FOR THE NEW VERSION!!!</span>

    Chapter 1

    Vaughn walked into the large meeting room. Where the other agents were sitting, waiting for him to begin.
    “Agent Vaughn, you’ve been Agent Bristow’s handler for almost a year now, yes?”
    “That’s correct.”
    “In your words, I need you to tell me what happened exactly.”

    Vaughn stared at the table in front of him for almost a minute before Devlin snapped him back to reality.

    “Agent Vaughn?”

    “Yes, I’m sorry.”

    “Please explain to the council what happened.”

    Vaughn didn’t want to explain, he just wanted to help in the search for Sydney.

    “It was an ordinary night, Sydney called me, she wanted to meet.”


    “Joey’s pizza?” she said waiting for him to answer.

    “Sorry ms. you have the wrong number.”

    “I’m sorry, thanks.”

    Vaughn grabbed his keys and headed out the door. He got into the car given to him by the CIA. Sydney was already at the warehouse waiting for him. He was late, Vaughn had never been late, she thought to herself. Just as she was about to leave he walked in.

    “Hey, sorry I’m late, traffic was all backed up.”
    “It’s okay.” She said smiling
    “So what’s up, are you okay Syd?”
    The first thing Vaughn always asked her was if she was okay.
    “Yeah I’m fine, I just, I had a fight with Francie. She has been acting so weird lately, she’s always so happy and outgoing, but lately she doesn’t even talk to me. Will’s even worried.”
    “It’s probably just because you’re away so much.” He reassured her.
    She started crying, “I feel like were growing apart, I hate lying to her, I hate lying to everyone.”
    “Hey, it’s okay, it’s going to be okay.” He said as he rubbed her back.
    She couldn’t take it anymore, she went up to him and hugged him, throwing him back a little. She had never felt safer than she had now, in the arms of the man she loved so much. She wanted to tell him how she felt but she knew it was against protocol. He held her until she stopped crying.

    “Do you want to go over the mission now. Or do you want to wait till tomorrow?”
    “We can do it now.”
    “Okay, it’s pretty easy, all you have to do is get the disc and get to the rendezvous point. Will you be okay?”
    “Just a walk in the park.” She said smiling.


    “That’s the last time I saw her.”
    Vaughn didn’t tell them the truth of course. He told them the reason they meet was because they were going over the mission plan.

    “Sir with your permission I would like to look for Agent Bristow myself.”

    “We can’t allow you to that, besides we have no clue were she is.”
    “Typical” Vaughn said under his breath.
    “What was that.”
    “I said typical.”
    “Meaning that you just sit here and say your doing everything you can when the truth is you’re doing nothing! The CIA has never done anything. When my father was being tortured, the CIA did nothing, they stood there and listened to him being killed!” “But I’m sure I don’t have to explain that to you.” “So don’t ever tell me you’re doing everything you can!”

    Vaughn sat down, he was out of breath but he finally got it out, he told them how he really felt about the CIA. Everyone was silent.

    “Are you done Agent Vaughn?” Devlin said rudely

    “For now.” Vaughn said

    “Good then you are excused.”

    Vaughn gave him a hard look, his eyes showed his anger as he walked out.

    “Vaughn!” Weiss yelled.

    “Not now Weiss.”

    “Yes now.”

    “What is it.”

    “I’m sorry man, I didn’t want to be the one to show you this.”

    Weiss had Vaughns attention

    “Show me what?”

    Weiss handed him a folder. He opened it and what he saw hurt him in the worst possible way.

    ("Sorry you guys are going to have to wait for the next chapter.”)
  2. aLiAsFaN_14

    aLiAsFaN_14 Rocket Ranger

    Jan 23, 2003
    wow this is a great story !! MORE SOON I CANT WAIT!
  3. kleverkitten

    kleverkitten Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    :o Wow. I am speechless. I can't wait to find out what happens!
  4. aliaschick4mv

    aliaschick4mv Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    East Coast
  5. kleverkitten

    kleverkitten Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    Same here, but I don't display it the....oh, what's the word.... oh well, the way aliaschick4mv does.

    I wanna find out what's in the folder!
  6. nancee

    nancee Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    from da hood
    oh man u know how to end with a cliffhanger..write more
  7. pasta_sauce385

    pasta_sauce385 Rocket Ranger

    Dec 21, 2002
    wow, i mean WOW thats quite a cliffhanger you better write more and SOON!! ;)
  8. Alias Elle

    Alias Elle Rocket Ranger

    Dec 1, 2002
    Los Angeles, CA
    Like I told someone else, I'm feeling too lazy to give a formal review, but so far, I like what I'm seeing.

    ~me :angel2:
  9. aliaschick4mv

    aliaschick4mv Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    East Coast
    LOL what do you mean "way"?
  10. ILuvMichael

    ILuvMichael Rocket Ranger

    Jan 26, 2003
    more, more, more, more, more

    and soon!
  11. SpyGurl001

    SpyGurl001 Rocket Ranger

    Jan 12, 2003
    Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh........Please!!!!!!!!!! POST MORE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    ~KM :angelic:
  12. Kristina

    Kristina Rocket Ranger

    Feb 28, 2003
    Okay guys heres more ive been writting it for the last four hours so you better like it i dont like to keep people waiting so here we go tell me if i'm missing anything okay.
  13. Kristina

    Kristina Rocket Ranger

    Feb 28, 2003
    <span style='font-size:21pt;line-height:100%'>THIS IS THE OLD VERSION!!!! NEW VERSION PAGE 8!!!</span>

    Okay I’m back, heres the next few chapters. Tell me what you think, sorry if there are some mistakes but I’ve been writing this for a long time.

    Chapter 2

    Vaughn stood there for a moment and stared at the photos. A tear drooped from his eye onto the photo of Sydney. The photo showed her bloody and bruised body spread across the floor. He leaned against the wall and started balling his eyes out as he slid to a crouching position. Everyone was staring at him. The only women he had ever loved was gone never to be by his side again.

    “Vaughn I’m so sorry, why don’t we go into my office.”

    Vaughn didn’t care who saw him

    “DON’T TOUCH ME! Just leave me alone.”
    Vaughn got up and headed out the door. He drove to the pier, the same spot where Sydney had first spilled her guts to him.
    “Why Sydney, why?” he cried
    He spent nearly 2 hours there in the same spot in the pouring rain. Vaughn got in his car and headed home. He opened the door and threw his keys on the table. He sat on the couch and once again started sobbing. This time he was angry. He got up and started pacing around. He kept asking himself why? When suddenly he punched the wall, breaking through the drywall. He fell onto the floor, and cried himself to sleep. When he woke up he felt a little better, and he knew what he had to do. He took a shower and then headed over to Sydney’s house. He rang the doorbell and Will answered the door.

    “Hey Vaughn, sorry Syd’s not here.”
    “I know.”

    Vaughn just stared at Will, Will knew something was wrong.

    “What is it?”

    “Can I come in?”

    “Yeah sure.”

    Vaughn went in and sat down.

    “Sydney’s…” he stopped for a moment to gather himself “Sydney’s dead Will.”

    Will just stares at Vaughn. He saw the hurt in his eyes. Then Will got up and grabbed Vaughn by the shirt.

    “What did you do to her you sorry son of a b****.”

    “Will I didn’t…”

    “I knew you didn’t really love her.”

    Vaughn’s eyes filled with tears as those words stabbed him in the heart. Will then realized what he had said, he let go of Vaughn.

    “I’m so sorry.”

    “Where’s Francie?” Vaughn asked

    “She said she was going to gone for a couple days.”

    Then something hit Vaughn

    “What time did she leave yesterday?”

    “About 10:00 I think, why?”

    “Where did she go.”

    “She didn’t say, why are so interested.”

    Chapter 3

    Vaughn ran out the door. Sydney had gone missing about the same time. She also said that she had been acting strange lately.

    “Weiss, its Vaughn you have to meet me at the warehouse now!”
    “Vaughn what’s going on?”
    “Just meet me there alright.”

    Weiss grabbed his jacket and headed out the door. Vaughn was already there when Weiss arrived.

    “Dude what’s going on?”
    “Sydney, she’s not dead.”
    Weiss sighed he thought Vaughn was in denial.
    “Vaughn, I know this is hard for you but…”
    “No, I mean she’s not dead. And I think I know who took her.”
    “What, Sydney’s best friend?”
    “She said Francie was acting weird.”
    “So, that’s not enough to say she abducted Sydney.”
    “It is for me.”
    “How do you even know were she is.”
    He looked at Weiss.
    “Marshall, I want you to find out everything you can about were Francie has been for the last couple days. All of her phone messages, where she went, what she bought everything.”

    “Okay, please would be nice.”
    Vaughn gave him a look.
    “Right, I’ll be done in about 30 minutes.”
    “Call me when you’re done.”

    While Marshall was working franticly Weiss and Vaughn went to Francie restaurant. What they found will haunt them forever. Francie had been dead for at least a week the place smelled awful.

    “I told you she didn’t abduct Sydney.”
    Just then Marshall called

    “Hi it’s Marshall, well I think you know that but…”
    “Right um I got a video clip of her at a private air strip.”
    “ L.A. Air Strip.”
    When Weiss and Vaughn arrived at the air strip they asked for the departures form last night. The only one that caught his attention was the one where Sarks former warehouse had been. Then he pulled out a picture of Sydney and showed it to the men that had worked security that night.

    “Did you see this women last night?”
    The security guards studied it closely.
    “Yeah sure I saw her, she was acting kind of weird though, she was crying for some reason.”
    Vaughn then pulled out a picture of Francie and all of them identified her as the one that’s was with Sydney.

    Weiss and Vaughn drove back to the Operations center and picked up there equipment.
    “Shouldn’t we just let Kendall handle this?”
    “Kendall isn’t going to do anything.”
    “Right, I forgot you like playing the hero.”
    Weiss and Vaughn boarded the plane.
    “Who do you think she is?” Weiss asked
    “I don’t know it could be Sark or Anna, I just don’t know.”
    “You have to disable the security cameras for atleast 15 minutes so I can get to Sydney.”
    Vaughn got off the plane and started running towards the warehouse.
    “Boot Camp, this is BoyScout I’m in position.”
    “Copy that, security off in 3, 2, 1.”
    “I’m going radio silent now.”
    Vaughn entered the warehouse and took out one guard by shooting him and then struck the other. He grabbed him.

    “Where is she?”
    “In the prison downstairs.”
    Vaughn knocked him out and then pulled him to the corner where he couldn’t be seen, Vaughn took the security guards jacket and mask and proceeded down stairs.

    “Hey you.”
    Vaughn turned around to see Francie or who ever she was.
    “Come with me.”
    She had no clue it was Vaughn. She opened the door to the cell where Sydney was.
    “Hello Sydney, so should we try this again?”
    “Where is the Rambaldi device?”
    “I’ll never tell you, you B****.”
    “Well I figured, I know your never going to budge so lets end this now.”
    Vaughn raised his gun at Sydney. Sydney was terrified she started crying it made Vaughn feel so bad, he didn’t want to scare her.

    “Well, what are you waiting for.”

    Sydney closed her eyes waiting for the pain. Boom, Boom. Sydney jumped from the noise. She slowly opened her eyes. There lying in front of her was Francie’s clone. The guard, which she had no idea was Vaughn, still pointed his gun at her even though she was clearly dead. He stepped out from the darkness and ran over to Sydney, scaring her. But when she saw he was freeing her she knew who it was.

    “Syd, I am so sorry I didn’t mean to scare you.”
    “It’s okay, oh my god I’m so glad to see you.”
    “Syd come on we have to get out of here.”

    Just then Sark came from behind.

    Chapter 4

    “Hold it.”
    “They both froze.”
    “No more escaping Sydney.”
    Sark pointed his gun at her and fired Vaughn jumped and pushed Sydney out of the way.
    “NO, VAUGHN!”
    Vaughn then fired at Sark injuring him. Sydney shot at him again but he was already gone.
    “I’m okay lets go.”
    They ran to the plane that Weiss was on.
    “felgercarb, what happened to him.”
    “He saved me once again.” Syd said.
    Vaughn was hit in chest.

    “This is Agent Weiss, I’m going to need a ambulance waiting at the air strip in 15 minutes, Agent Vaughn has been severely injured.”
    When they landed sure enough there was an ambulance waiting. They took Vaughn away and Sydney went with him never leaving his side.
    “Okay, I’m sorry miss but you’ll have too wait outside.”
    Sydney couldn’t sit still she just watched threw the small window in the door of the operating room. She watched as they removed the bullet that was centimeters away from his heart. A couple minutes later Jack walked in.

    “Sydney, I heard, is Vaughn okay.”
    “I don’t know.”
    “How did it happen.”
    “He took a bullet for me dad.”
    Jack starred at his daughter as her eyes welled up with tears, she was praying Vaughn would be okay.
    “Sydney we have to get back for the debrief.”
    “No, I’m not leaving him.”
    “He’s going to be in surgery for a while, you can come back and see him.”
    She knew he was right, she couldn’t stay.
    “You go, I’ll be there in a minute.”
    Jack nodded and then walked away.
    She turned to the door and looked back at Vaughn, “I love you.” she said under her breath. Then she walked away.

    Back at the operations center.

    “Agent Bristow” said Kendall “It’s nice to have you back.”
    “I didn’t agree with Agent Vaughn but once again everything turned out good.”
    “Do you know who Francie’s clone was?”
    “It wasn’t Sark because Sark was the one who shot Vaughn.”
    “Vaughn was shot?” Kendall said suprised
    “Yeah, you didn’t know.”
    “Is he okay?”
    “I don’t know, but he saved me.”
    “Anyway I think it might have been Anna.”
    “I thought she was dead.” Kendall said
    “So did I.”
    After the debrief Sydney stopped buy the flower shop and picked up some bright flowers. “These will make that white, ugly, hospital room certainly look better.” She thought to herself as she picked out a dozen roses. She gave the cashier the 20 dollars and then went off to the hospital.

    “Hi, I’m looking for Agent Michael Vaughn.”
    “Yes, room 47.”
    “Thank you.”
    Syd walked down the hall to room 47. She walked in and saw Vaughn sleeping. She pulled the chair over to the side of the bed and sat down, she grabbed his hand. She waited for him to wake up but she was so tired that she fell asleep. Vaughn woke up while she was sleeping, and had been watching her rest.

    She sighed and woke up “Hey, how long have you been up?”
    “An hour or so, I didn’t want to wake you.”
    “How do you feel?”
    “Better, but not great.”
    “How are you, are you hurt?” he asked
    “You never seem to surprise me.”
    “What?” he said smiling
    “You’re always worried about me, even when you’re the one that is hurt.”
    “I’m sorry it’s just, I have to tell you something. I…” just then the doctor walked in the room.
    “Mr. Vaughn you seem to be healing pretty fast, you should be able to leave by tonight.”
    Sydney looked at Vaughn with a smile on her face.
    “Agent Bristow I’m sorry but visiting hours are over for now.” The nurse replied
    “Okay, Hey I’ll pick you up tonight okay.”
    “No Syd, you really don’t have to.”
    “I want to, after all, you saved my life twice in one day.”
    They smiled at each other.
    “I’ll see you later.”
    With that she left. She wondered what he was going to say to her, and it was almost killing her. Well her wish was about to come true for she was about to find out what he would have said. She reached into her right jacket pocket to pull out her keys but in stead she pulled out a little box with a note attached. She decided to wait until she got home to open it. Of course traffic was murder and she was stuck, she had been in the same spot for 15 minutes. So she finally gave in. She opened it. It read.

    Dear Sydney,

    Since the first time I saw you, I couldn’t take my eyes off you. It killed me every time I had to look into your eyes and see all the hurt that was built up. I was your friend from the beginning, even though you were reluctant to trust me at first, after all you went threw I didn’t blame you. I wanted to let you know that even though it may seem like you’re all alone sometimes, you’re not, I’m here, I have been from the beginning and I always will be. I never knew how much one person could change my life until you walked into my office. Now when I look at you, all I want to do is get you as far away from this job as possible. I should have said this a long time ago, but I was scared that you might not feel the same way. So I just wanted to say I love you. You don’t have to say anything just know that I love you and I will always love you.


    Vaughn (Your guardian angel forever.)

    Sydney was crying as she read it. She then opened the box it was a necklace with her birthstone in it, she put it on. He must have slipped it into her pocket while she was sleeping just then a song came on the radio.

    “Oh not now, please.” She put her hand over her mouth trying to stop herself from crying.
    She started having a flashback of all the times she was with Vaughn.

    When the visions around you
    Bring tears to your eyes,
    And all that surrounds you
    Are secrets and lies

    I’ll be your strength
    I’ll give you hope
    Keeping your faith when it’s gone
    The one you should call
    Was standing here all along

    And I will take you in my arms
    And hold you right where you belong
    ‘Til the day my life is through
    This I promise you
    This I promise you.

    I’ve loved you forever
    In life times before
    And I promise you never
    Will you hurt anymore

    I give you my word
    I give you my heart
    This is a battle we’ve won
    And with this vow
    Forever has now begun.

    Just close your eyes
    Each lovin’ day
    And know this feeling wont go away
    ‘Til the day my life is through
    This I promise you
    This I promise you

    Over and over I fall
    When I hear you call
    Without you in my life, baby
    I just wouldn’t be living at all

    And I will take you in my arms
    And hold you right were you belong
    ‘Til the day my life is through
    This I promise you, baby

    Just close your eyes
    Each lovin’ day
    And know this feeling wont go away
    Every word I say is true
    This I promise you
    Every word I say is true
    This I promise you
    I promise you.

    (Sorry, I don’t like Nsync, but this is like the perfect song for the occasion.)

    When Sydney came back to realization she saw that traffic was moving, people were honking their horns. If she wasn’t still thinking of Vaughn she probably would have gotten out and kicked their asses.

    Later that night

    Ring, Ring, Ring

    “Hello?” Syd said, hoping that it would be Vaughn.
    “Hey Syd, can you come pick me up?”
    “Yeah I’ll be right there.”
    “I…I’ll see you when I get there.”
    “Okay, Bye Syd.”
    “Don’t say Bye.”
    “Sorry, see you later Syd.”
    She hung up and headed out the door. She couldn’t wait to see him. She was planning what she would say to him. Then she got an idea. She pulled up to the doors and parked. It was raining so she got out and ran toward Vaughn who was at the door waiting.
    “Hi” she said with a sweet smile. He had been waiting to see that smile for hours.
    “Hi, thanks for picking me up.
    “No problem.”
    They ran to the car.
    “Man I didn’t know it was this bad out.”
    “Hey, do you mind if we stop somewhere real fast?” She asked
    “No, that’s fine.” He said
    She drove out to the pier. She parked the car and got out leaving Vaughn in the car. He rolled down the window.
    “Come on.” She called to him.
    He got out of the car and ran toward Sydney with his jacket over his head, it was pouring now.
    “Your crazy you know that.”
    She stopped at the railing that they had meet at every time she wanted to talk.
    “What are you doing?” he asked laughing
    She made him look her in the eyes. He saw the necklace he had given her around her neck.
    “Your right you have been here for me from the beginning, and I didn’t really realize that until I almost lost you in Taipei.”
    “You have saved my life so many times, that thank you seems to be becoming an understatement.”
    “So I’ll start to use three other words.”
    “I love you.”
    “Ilove you so much Vaughn.”
    “I love you too Sydney, and I promise I will never leave you alone again.”
    She threw herself in his arms. Her head hitting his chest, right were he was shot. But he didn’t even feel it.
    He pulled her head up from his chest and kissed her softly, for what seemed to be hours. He had been wearing a white dress shirt and she saw the bloody bandage beneath his clothes.
    He looked down to what she was starring at.
    “Come on, we have to stop it from bleeding.”
    She took his hand and they ran back to the car.
    “I’ll take you to my place.”
    They arrived about 20 minutes later.
    She started up a fire in the living room.
    “Sit down on the couch. I’ll get the bandages.”
    He did as he was told. She came back with a roll of bandages, and sat down next to him. She started to unbutton his drenched, bloody shirt. He brushed a piece of her wet hair out of her face and smiled. He leaned in to kiss her but she resisted.
    “I have to change your bandage first before you bleed to death.”
    So he let her change the bandage. Then they changed and went into Syd’s bedroom
    “So now can I kiss you.” He asked
    “You’d better.”
    He leaned down to kiss her as she threw her arms around him making sure not to hit his wound again.
    They made out for about a half-hour before Will came in.
    “Hey, oh sorry I didn’t know.”
    “It’s okay.” She responded
    They both sat up
    “Hey do you know where Francie is?”
    Syd shook her head and looked at Vaughn.
    “Vaughn, what about you?” Will asked
    Vaughn looked uncomfortable. He knew they were talking about the real Francie.
    “When me and Weiss were looking for you, we stopped by her restaurant. We found her in the back room she had been shot, she was dead for over a week. I’m so sorry.” Vaughn looked at the floor.
    Will had a furious look in his eyes.
    “Oh I see, you torture me by taking the one women I love away from me, and just when I fall in love with someone else you take her away from me too.”
    “WILL!” Sydney says, you can tell she’s pretty mad at him.
    “ever since you came into her life you’ve been a plague on us all, you son of a b****” Will said to Vaughn.
    Sydney got up and tried to calm him down a little. Then he crossed the line he pushed Sydney back down on the bed. That’s when Vaughn got up and stood between Will and Syd.

    “Don’t you ever touch her like that again!”
    “Or what daddy will come after me.”
    “Now you’re pushing it.”
    Will pushed him hard making Vaughn stumble back a couple of feet
    “No, I’m pushing you.”
    Sydney got back up and tried to get in between Vaughn and Will but Will pushed her again.
    “That’s it” Vaughn said
    Vaughn punched Will hard in the face.
    “I told you not to touch her.”
    Will leaped at Vaughn causing them to fall onto the floor. Will saw Vaughn’s wound and pushed his thumb hard into the bullet hole Sydney had just stopped from bleeding, he screamed in pain. Sydney immediately threw Will against the wall.
    “STOP IT! NOW!”
    Will paused he was out of breath. Sydney bent down to help Vaughn. Will ran and pushed Sydney onto the bed again Vaughn got up and ran his head into wills stomach sending Will back into the wall. Will then punched Vaughn three or four times in the stomach. Vaughn fell to his knees Will kicked him with everything he had right into Vaughns Wound. Vaughn screamed in pain as he hit the floor. Will picked up a lamp and was about to throw it at Vaughn’s head.
    “Don’t move” Sydney had managed to pull out Vaughns gun from his holster. She pointed it at Will.
    “Are you actually going to shot me Syd?”
    “Drop the lamp.”
    “Drop it? Okay he dropped it on Vaughn’s head causing Vaughn to black out.
    Will moved closer to Syd “You know I did love you Syd, more than this loser ever could.”
    “Yeah, well I love that loser.”
    Vaughn was starting to wake up slowly but surely. Syd made sure not to look at him so she didn’t get Will’s attention. All of a sudden the phone rang causing Sydney to look away for a second. While she wasn’t looking Will pulled out his gun and was just about to shot Sydney, when a shot sounded. Will looked at Sydney and fell to the floor. Vaughn had shot him before he could shot Sydney. She lowered her gun and ran over to Vaughn.

    “Oh my god Vaughn.”
    “It’s okay sweet heart.”
    Did he just call me his sweet heart “Look at you, come on we have to get you cleaned up.”
    She led him to the bathroom. While she cleaned his wounds he kept a close eye on Will just to make sure he wasn’t getting back up while the paramedics were taking him away.
    “I’m so sorry Syd.”
    “For what?”
    “For everything, I mean you just lost your two best friends in the last couple days.”
    “Hey” she made him look at her “I didn’t lose my best friend, I didn’t lose you.”
    “I can really use a shower.” Vaughn said laughing
    “Yeah you can.” She laughed
    “Ha, ha, you don’t smell to good either.” What was he saying she always smelled good.
    “Is that an invitation?”
    “Maybe it is.”
    They smiled at each other and then jumped into the shower. He got out first pulling on a T-shirt and some long shorts. He went and laid down on the bed. She came out with a low cut black tank top on and some jogging pants. It drove him crazy. He would still go crazy if she were wearing an old granny nightgown. She walked over and laid down next to him. Putting her hand on his chest.
    “Goodnight Michael.”
    “Goodnight Sydney.”
    They slept in each others arms all night.

  14. nancee

    nancee Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    from da hood
  15. Kristina

    Kristina Rocket Ranger

    Feb 28, 2003
    Thanks i appreciate it because it took me so long to write. Maybe i'll make Will come back from the dead you never know.
  16. Alias Elle

    Alias Elle Rocket Ranger

    Dec 1, 2002
    Los Angeles, CA
    I give this a thumbs-up. Just one quick note though- say who's speaking; not in script form, just say "... she said" or "...he said" because at some points I got kinda lost.

    ~me :angel2:
  17. nancee

    nancee Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    from da hood
    oOoOo thatd be good...
  18. Crawstinium

    Crawstinium Rocket Ranger

    Jan 15, 2003
    well, i really loved the story, but WILL'S DEAD!!???
    you really succeeded in a lot of good emotion between syd and vaughn, but then she shows absolutely no emotion when she finds out that Francie's dead, and then she's HAPPY when vaughn KILLS will? WHAT
    it makes me HATE vaughn
    okay sorry, otherwise it is really an excellent story, i love it :)
  19. pennstatechic

    pennstatechic Rocket Ranger

    Jan 26, 2003
    Florida (Now PA for college)
    Wow your story is awesome! I love it. I was hoping that wasn't the ending! Was will bad or something, or was he just jealous! It's a great story, and please post more soon!
  20. kleverkitten

    kleverkitten Rocket Ranger

    Feb 26, 2003
    Awww... that was sweet. Is there going to be more?
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