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Discussion in 'Creative Writing & Arts' started by AliasFan4eva, May 12, 2003.

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  1. AliasFan4eva

    AliasFan4eva Rocket Ranger

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    HEY! I FORGOT TO PUT THIS AT THE EARLIER! I DON'T OWN ALIAS OR ANY OF THE CHARACTERS! ALTHOUGH I WISH I OWNED MV! DON'T SUE ME! I DON'T EVEN HAVE ENOUGH MONEY TO BUY CANDY AT WALGREENS. I DONT OWN WALGREENS EITHER. THAT WOULD BE COOL THOUGH! LOL SHUTTING UP! ENJOY THE FIC! R/R! TOOTLEZ! ~GRACE CAREY


    <span style='font-size:14pt;line-height:100%'>Hey Everyone, I got an idea for a fic! I know! I know! Everyone is writing speculation fics but I haven't gone near the speculation boards and so my ideas are my own. I have an idea and frankly I need something to keep me buisy this summer so my head doesn't explode. I don't know how long this fic will be but I can't wait to start writing it! I have to go watch the season finale again so everything will be fresh in my mind for writing. Here is a tiny peek at what I've already written....</span>

    ****************** Sneaky peek**************************

    Michael Vaughn sat at his desk, idly twirling his pen. He was thinking about the same thing he was always thinking about; Sydney. It was two years ago, to the day that she had gone missing. Two years since his life and heart had been torn away from him, and ripped into tiny bits. Two years since he had been slapped in the face with the realization the Sydney wasn't just his girlfriend, but the woman he was supposed to spend the rest of his life with. Of course, he had realized this only a moment too late.

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    What do you think? Do you think this little fic has any potential? Do you think it's crappy? Let me know, please! I would love to hear from you! ~G
     
  2. Ames47

    Ames47 Amy Strikes Back

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    it sounds like a good start!! i am interested to see how it goes so yes continue on!! :D (y)
     
  3. liliana

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    cool start can't wait to see what happens next
     
  4. alisydas

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    its good
     
  5. spywolf

    spywolf Wicked Writer

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    I'd love to read more of this! I love the S/V beginning.
     
  6. A.I.C.

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    It's not crapy!!!!! It's really good (y) ...keep on writing...I'd like to read more :woot:
     
  7. krzykty57789

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    yea, i'd like to see where this goes it could be really,really interesting
     
  8. Aliasfan23

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    I want to know what happens!! This sounds great!
     
  9. Kristina

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    COOL! Keep posting more!
     
  10. bluheart13

    bluheart13 Rocket Ranger

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    it doesnt seem crappy to me. i say you should post the story.

    timmy :blink:
     
  11. sarahh729

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    <span style='font-size:14pt;line-height:100%'>i think its good so far, post! :D </span>
     
  12. AliasFan4eva

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    Michael sat at his desk, idly twirling his pen. He was thinking about the same thing he was always thinking about; Sydney. It was two years ago, to the day that she had gone missing. Two years since his life and heart had been torn away from him, and ripped into tiny bits. Two years since he had been slapped in the face with the realization the Sydney wasn't just his girlfriend, but the woman he was supposed to spend the rest of his life with. Of course, he had realized this only a moment too late. The memory played over and over again in his mind, driving him insane. He was about to go home for the day, suddenly feeling overwhelmed with the memories, which were all flooding back at once, when his friend Robert walked in.

    "Hey Mike, How ya doing?" he said, his voice full of cheeriness.

    How am I doing? Michael wished more than anything he could tell Rob just how well he was doing.
    Michael nodded in reply, "Fine." he said, his voice full of hidden sarcasm, yet it came out in an expressionless monotone, that would give it away to anyone that he was lying.

    "You sure you're okay? You don't look so hot Mikey. Maybe you should sit down? I'll call Roberta. She can come and get you."

    Roberta, my wife. Well at least that is what I keep trying to tell myself. I mean what kind of marriage is it when you don't love her and she doesn't love you. A lie! And that's just what my marriage is! A lie! A pawn, A scheme to keep me alive. Or at least as alive as I am ever going to be without Sydney.

    "No Rob, that's alright. I'm fine. Just tired. I'll see you tomorrow." Michael says, patting him on the shoulder before walking out of his office.

    "What's the matter with him?" Henry asks Robert as Michael walks out of his office and down the hall, staring blankly at the floor.
    Robert shrugs his shoulders. "Don't ask me."


    As Michael drove down the roads, staring straight ahead, the visions of the day his life was changed forever came back to him without any warning. He pulled his car over, beside the road and turned the car off, pulling the key out. Stepping out of the car, he walked to the front of it and leaned on the hood. He reached up and pinched the bridge of his nose, trying to calm himself and fight the tears he knew might very well come.
    God! What's the matter with me. Why can't I move on? It's been two years and I can't move on! It's as if it happened only yesterday. Why did I let her go home? Why didn't I ask her what had been on my mind all along? Why hadn't I asked her! I would give anything to bring her back. Everyone had told him, it's been two years and you haven't dated. You haven't even looked at another girl. Sydney would want you to move on. The thing was he knew they were right, but the truth was, if he didn't want to move on. He was still in love with Sydney and he knew in his heart that he wouldn't move on. Ever.



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    <span style='font-size:21pt;line-height:100%'>Okay, I know this is totally depressing! I hate writing the depressing part! I hate reading depressing stories so I know you are all like blah blah shut up! Where is the fluff! LOL! HAHA! It's comming! Next chapter! I promise. LOL! SO anyway, how do you like it? Let me know. Love you all! Tootles! XOXO ~G </span>
     
  13. Ames47

    Ames47 Amy Strikes Back

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    aww thats really sad but i like it!! cant wait for the next chap!!!
     
  14. Angel_dj

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    I hope you write more soon :)
     
  15. jaco16syd

    jaco16syd Rocket Ranger

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    I love this...keep it going!!!!!
     
  16. Moriel

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    i love it eventhough it's drpressing post more ASAP
     
  17. pennstatechic

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    It's really good, post more ASAP :)

    Lauren :angelic:
     
  18. bluheart13

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    WHY DOES EVERYONE POST A STORY AND VAUGHN IS MARRIED!!!!!!?????????im sooo confused and i wish it would just stop. stop stop stop. well anyways post more soon.
     
  19. AliasFan4eva

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    Well, haha lol I'm just writing a fic following the season finale where he is supposedly married, lol! But hehe no worries peeps! it will all work out! More ASAP! Thanks for all your super dee dooper reviews! LOV YA! Tootles. XOXO> ~GRACE CAREY
     
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    It was way past dark by the time Michael walked into his house.
    "Michael, you're home! I was so worried!" Roberta called from the living room. She ran in followed by a policeman.
    Throwing her arms around his shoulders, she buried her head in the crook of his neck. "I was so worried." she whispered.
    "All right folks. If everything is alright, I'll be heading home. The missus might call the cops on me." he said with a laugh and a tip of his hat, before he showed himself out.
    "Thanks Charles!" Roberta called after him, letting go of Michael to close the door. As soon as it was shut, she went and sat down on the couch. She patted the spot next to her in indication that he was to come and sit by her.
    "Berty, I don't want to talk about it right now." Michael pleaded.
    "Come on sweetie. It might help."
    "You don't want to talk about my problems. I mean, you have enough with your boyfriend and all. You don't need to hear about mine."
    "You act like it's my job! Like I was payed to live this life. Michael, I'm stuck in this life for the same reason you are. You can talk to me. It's not like you can talk to anyone else about it anyway."
    He sighed and sat down next to her.
    "What's going on?"
    "It's Sydney."
    "Oh." she said sympathetically.
    "Yeah. She....She went missing today two years ago." he started, before reaching up to massage the forming wrinkles on his forehead.
    "Oh sweetie. Come here." she said scooting over and wrapping her arms around him. Michael rested his head on her shoulder and breathed in a deep, soothing, and calming breath, once again fighting back the tears he didn't want to come. She cooed softly as Michael finally let someone in his new life into his old life.
    "I just.... I just miss her so much." he sighed, pulling away."I know. I know how you feel. I miss Theo more than I can say." Roberta said as the tears brimmed on the edge of her eyes.
    "When was the last time you saw him?" Michael asked, feeling a connection he hadn't felt before with Roberta. They had both been torn away from the ones they love.
    "Theo? About two years ago."
    "Our lives are so screwed up." Michael whispered.
    "You're telling me." she said, shaking her head.
    "I'm going to get to bed." he said looking down. "I just don't feel like eating."
    She nodded, but as he walked into his room she called back, "Oh Michael! I forgot!"
    "What?"
    "Some man, his name was like Eric, I think. He called."
    "Oh my Gosh!" Michael said, his face brightening.
    "What?" she said, tilting her head.
    "That's one of my friends. You know, from before."
    "Wow! Maybe you're getting out of this. I mean he wouldn't call unless something had happened."
    "Yeah. What did he say?"
    "He left a phone number and a time for you to call him back. Sorry, I forgot. You know, I was too busy worrying about where you were." she said rolling her eyes.
    He rolled his eyes back, grinning slightly.
    He grabbed the number and went to his room.
    He looked at the number and the time.
    A real smile spread across his face for the first time in what seemed like forever.
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    I know! I said no more depressing but I had to make one more quickie chapter to lead into the fluff that is coming. I know it's kind of confusing right now. Everything will sort out soon! Like next chapter I am thinking. LOL! Well how do you like it? Does it suck? Is it okay? What does it need? How can I make it better? Let me know, and be a critic. I want to write when I get older so I need to practice now. LOL! And at how I'm writing now, I can use a lot of practice!!!!!! LOL! Anyway, Let me know! Thanks! ~Carey
     

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