Ok here's some constructive criticism.
Where are their powers and when are they going to use them if not now? You started your story at the beginning of february and its july now. :blink: Whenever you update I have to go back and read the last chapter you've written to remember what's going on..If I wasn't stubborn about reading this I would have lost track of it. We are still at the same day for five months..If you are planning on writing a long story either you should update more often or your chapters should be making more time progress. I wouldn't be writing these if I wasn't interested in your story. Hope you know that I like this story and that's why I'm giving you a feedback. I totally understand that you must be busy with your life to update more often so why don't you make a time progress in your new chapters to come. I hope my words don't discourage you in any way as my intention is just the opposite. This chapter was so heartbreaking and I can't wait for what's coming next..
You read my mind I was trying to post chapters more often and I am gald to sy that here comes the next chapter thank you for your patience. I jus thought taht no one would like my story but thanks to you I know that someone does so I am going to post more often. Still have found a schedul that work for me but I am hoping for every two days I think or posting a bunch of cahpters at the end of every week.
but nay way thank you for your support
Chapter Ten
NC/17
In Russian
1918
That night a guard entered the cell to bring the family food but stopped at what he saw “Well, Well, what do we have here?” he spoke with a smile as four more men came into the cell.
“What is it?” they asked in unison
“The spunky ones dead” answered their superior “take her out of the way and bury her in the back” he ordered to of his men followed his orders waking Alexei and Anastasia
“No leave her alone” they both screamed waking up their family as the grabbed onto their sister’s waist desperately trying to pull her away from Rasputin’s men.
“Let her go” Olga cried getting up and jumping on one of the guard back
“Can’t you see that she dead, leave her here” Tatiana screamed as she attacked the other guard.
“Grab them” called the superiors just as Alexandra and Nicholas attacked the last two men before they could reach their children.
“Don’t you dare touch them” Nicholas said in a menacing tone as he punched Rasputin’s man in the face.
“How dare you try to take my child’s body? Bastards” Alexandra cried also socking Rasputin’s man in the face.
Their superior grabbed Alexandra from behind by the hair smacking her on the face, the impact dropped her to the ground. This allowed the other man to grab Nicholas from behind and pin his arms behind his back. This gave that man the chance to grab Olga and knock her put with one punch as the other tow held Tatiana.
“Don’t you frackin move” the superior yelled as Alexandra tried to get up pointing a gun to Alexei’s head which stopped her in her tracks.
“Now we are taking the little whore and putting in the ground. But I can make it two Romanov if you don’t cooperate.” he said with a smile freezing the family in their track.
“No you can’t take, please don’t take her” Anastasia and Alexei cried into their sister stomach holding on desperately even though no one was pulling her body away. One of the men stepped forward and yanked Anastasia right arm back eliciting a scream of pain “aaah” as he said “back off you little bitch” lifting his hand to the child but Nicholas stopped him with a loud “No stop”
“Please don’t hit her I will make her let go” he finished defeated as the man holding him let go.
“Good I’m happy you see it our way” the superior spoke as he signaled for his man to let Anastasia go “But what about the other child?”
Alexandra spoke quickly “I will remove him, please don’t touch him.”
Both walked over to their distraught children quietly silently sobbing with them. Alexandra bent down first and whispered into Alexei ear “remember what you promised you sister Maria?” Alexei just nodded “Good I need you to let go alright, they are going to take her and mama needs you to be a brave little brother.”
“Ok mama, I’ll do it for Maria” Alexei replied and reluctantly let go of his sister climbing into his mothers arms.
Nicholas then bent down to Anastasia and spoke to her “Anastasia papa needs you to look at him.”
“Good” he said when she did as he asked “I need you to be papa’s brave grand duchess, you need to let her go”
“But papa” Anastasia whimpered but Nicholas cut her off “Anastasia remember that Maria said she would be in Alexei hear forever well that goes for you as long as you never for get her”
Anastasia thought about it for a moment and then slowly let go and like her brother climbed into her father arms.
“That’s better, take the girls and let’s go” the men did as they where told releasing Tatiana and picking up the limp cold body of Maria up.
Then the superior spoke to the Romanov “we will return for you” then he walked out followed by his men leaving a sobbing family behind.
Tatiana watched them go and then quickly crawled towards her sister Olga pulling her head into her leap as she brushed the hair out of her face. When she had her sister safely in her arms Tatiana looked at her father
“What did her mean that he would come back papa?” she asked in a very shaky voice.
“I don’t know hunny, I don’t know” answered Nicholas not sure of what to tell his fearful daughter.
Two hours later:
Rasputin’s men came into the cell once more and each forcefully grabbed one of the Romanov.
“Bring them not” ordered their superior as he led them out of the cell.
The Romanov just allowed them to guide them through the hall all heart broken from their loss. They lead into the study which held a satisfied Rasputin sitting at the desk.
“You bastard you killed my child, your monsters killed her” Alexandra yelled at Rasputin as his men held her back.
Rasputin got up and smirked “oh come on my men told me she enjoyed it” then addressing his men he asked “How was it that you described it?” Then suddenly remembering he turned to Alexandra and said “A yes they said she screamed like a banshee in pleasure, hahahahah” he laughed causing all his men to laugh.
“You son of bitch” Nicholas yelled leaping for Rasputin’s throat “I’ll kill you” he continued as Rasputin’s men forcefully held him back “I’ll kill you all”
“For what, Nicholas, letting them rape your daughter or for frackin your wife in front of your child” Nicholas struggled against Rasputin’s men who finally punched him in the stomach and let him fall to his knees.
“Your wife was so easy to break, Nicho” Rasputin used the lover secret names for each as he leaned in front of Nicholas. “I had over and over and now that she was mine, I don’t want her anymore, isn’t that funny” Rasputin laughed “you can your whore back”
“I will kill you” Nicholas spat into Rasputin’s face.
“Very well” Rasputin said “Take them out back, kill the children first then kill the parents. Their children’s powers will travel to the closest relative if they do not name an heir.” He said smirking “Your children don’t know anyone but you and Alexandra that I have not killed yet is’nt that true Nicholas.” He said addressing Nicholas who didn’t answer “That’s what I thought. What are you waiting for? Take them and shoot them.”
“No wait I will give you my families powers. You don’t have to kill them first, we will give you our powers willing” Nicholas breathed bowing his head. “He won’t let your family live and you know it.” Nicholas thought to himself “If you give him your powers he will use it against you and all who are gifted” he continued in his head and then thought of something.
“Will give you what you want but may we please have some time alone, my children are very distressed and that will not help in transferring powers.”
After thinking for a moment Rasputin finally nodded and said “very well, have your time but there will be guards at the door” then Rasputin and his men left the Romanov alone.
TBC
I just can't write anymore sorry