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Does History Repeat Itself?

Discussion in 'Creative Writing & Arts' started by Aliasfan23, May 23, 2003.

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  1. Aliasfan23

    Aliasfan23 Rocket Ranger

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    Prologue
    To most people, this would be an ordinary day. The sun was shining brightly in the Los Angeles sky. Most people would have enjoyed going to work today. Ryan was not one of those people. He was caught up in a game of ‘take what you want, kill the enemy, and lie to anyone you care about.’ He was caught up in the game of espionage. His friends could never know what he did. Well, what he really did. As far as they were concerned, he was an overworked real estate agents. In truth, he was an agent, but no real estate agent. If they found out what he really did, his boss would kill them. This man, Ryan’s boss, Adam Sanderez, was evil. You would think that this man was brainwashed with thoughts of predictions, and prophets, and life, and death, and an obsession of the mind, and how it works. This prophet, the one he was brainwashed into following, was named Leo Ambedel. He lived hundreds of years ago, and thought to be a descendent of Milo Rambaldi. Adam Sanderez was a man who wanted power among his peers. He was part of an alliance, one that was against the United States. Ryan works for this man, doing his bidding. Unknown to Sanderez, however, Ryan was a double agent working with the CIA. He was working to bring this alliance down. His handler was a woman named Abby Rollins. She was beautiful, in every man’s eyes. Oddly enough, this is what kept him going, Abby, knowing that he would have the chance to see her. He had become close friends with her, even having feelings of something more than friendship. If asked, he would deny that they were loving feelings. He had to, for fear of reassignment. If he were to become ‘emotionally involved’, he would be reassigned. It was against protocol for him to care about her. He couldn’t bare to have another handler, they worked well together. Even to his friends, he would deny it. Thoughts of his last girlfriend kept him from admitting it, even to himself. Never would you hear him say he loved her. Love was what he thought he had felt for his last girlfriend, Candace. If it wasn’t love he had felt, then what was it? Even after two months, the thought puzzled him, and he was supposed to be almost a genius. At least, that is what his I.Q. scores said. He never spoke to Abby about it. He couldn’t. It was to hard, for both of them. Even with the closeness of their friendship, there were things that couldn’t be said. He cared to much about her to hurt her. He kept hope, though, that one day he would be able to be with her. He had heard stories of the great Sydney Bristow and her handler, Michael Vaughn. He had heard stories of how much they cared for each other and how that was what kept them going. To him, it was hard for him to believe that someone could go through that much pain. It was even harder to believe that these people were his parents. He was going through exactly the same thing that his own mother did. Knowing that she had gotten through all of is gave him hope to look forward to the future, a future with Abby. Like I said before, most people think that today is an ordinary day, but for Ryan, anything could happen.
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    A/N: Please R/R! Criticism is welcomed!
     
  2. Chanel

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    this is looking to be a great!!!! GREAT!!!!! fanfic! keep goig!!!. the only thiung i might be able to suggest is that u break the chap inot mor paragraphs... thats it though. this is sooooo good i love it! plaese continue!
     
  3. xdancer

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    I like this start. Definitely keep going. I hope you have some S/V scenes coming up.
     
  4. girlincognito

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    this is lookin good and i agree about the paragragh thing. But other than that i love it
     
  5. Aliasfan23

    Aliasfan23 Rocket Ranger

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    Well that was the prologue, I didn't know where to split it up. Thanks for the great reviews! I love it when people are truly honest! It's the best thing for a writer...I'll try to write more soon!
     
  6. Aliasfan23

    Aliasfan23 Rocket Ranger

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    I'm an experienced handler, YAY!
     
  7. feeling_like_a_spy

    feeling_like_a_spy Rocket Ranger

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    good job! lots of detail.
     
  8. Aliasfan23

    Aliasfan23 Rocket Ranger

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    Thanks!! I'll try to write more soon!
     
  9. girlincognito

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    WOOHOO more soon I love it as much as i like the post telling fics its a nice chenge wen there is something else.
     
  10. totallyspies

    totallyspies Rocket Ranger

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    that seems really good...continue.
     
  11. FrEeLaNcEr03

    FrEeLaNcEr03 Rocket Ranger

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    its really good. will this story have ryan and the other chick in it or will it have sydney and vaughn in it? j/w. really good so far though!
     
  12. pennstatechic

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    It sounds great so far, I hope their will be some S/V scene's soon. nice start though, keep going (y)

    Lauren :angelic:
     
  13. Aliasfan23

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    Hey guys! Sorry for the long wait for the first chap.....I have to tell you though, its not really an s/v fic its more of a Sydney's son fic. I mean Sydney and Vaughn will be in it, but it won't focus on them. Anyway, I finished the first chap today. I'll try to post it tommorow or Thusday, but my aunt might be coming in so...i dunno, but I do have it written. i just have to have enough patience to type it, its four pages long on looseleaf paper......blah! Thanks for being patient! How do you set up a PM list so that I can PM people when I update?
     
  14. very nice. *applauds* and trust me, it may seem a lot on loose leaf, but once you type it up. you would be like WHAT?! that's it?!. any ways, hope you post the first chap soon. but very very nice start great job.
    --mandy :angelic:
     
  15. Aliasfan23

    Aliasfan23 Rocket Ranger

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    Thanks! I know the whole 'wait I thought I wrote more than that' thing......
     
  16. xdancer

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    I can't wait for the next chap. Can you PM me when you get it up?
     
  17. krzykty57789

    krzykty57789 Rocket Ranger

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    yea ..same here..this is a good story..i luv it
     
  18. Aliasfan23

    Aliasfan23 Rocket Ranger

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    yea I can PM you! Thanks for the support! Question. how do you make a PM list? I need to know if you want me to PM you
     
  19. Vaughn'sGirl

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    can you pm me too once you figure it out , sorry i can't help~ please?
     
  20. Aliasfan23

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    yea sure I can PM you Vaughn'sGirl! I'll PM you when someone tells me how to make a list....
     

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