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What If

Discussion in 'Creative Writing & Arts' started by Alias*Kelli, Mar 1, 2003.

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  1. Alias*Kelli

    Alias*Kelli Rocket Ranger

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    I was thinking and what if Danny never died and him and Syd were still together would she still meat Vaughn.
    Ok Will was the one that Syd told and he was killed so she still went to the CIA and meat vaughn but Danny was having an affaire, but wih who. Ok i'll get to the story now.

    Chapter 1

    *At Sydneys house*

    Syd-''Hey danny''

    Danny-''Syd I didn't know that you were gonna be home so early other wise I would have got some dinner ready''

    Syd-''What you would have went to some fast food place, brought it back here and said you made it?''

    Danny-''Maybe''

    Syd-'' Whatever I have to go anyway.''

    Danny-''Why you just got here.''

    Syd-''I have to go to work I should be back in a cupple of hours.''

    Danny-''Wern't you just at work.''

    Syd-''Yeah.''

    Danny-''Then why are you going back.''

    Syd-''Because I forgot to do something.''

    Danny-''Whatever I have to go back to my house and finish some of the packing anyway.''

    He kissed here and walked out the door.

    *At Vaughns House*

    Vaughn-''Hey Alice''

    Alice-''Sorry Mike I have to go.''

    Vaughn-''But I just got here.''

    Ring Ring

    Alice-''Is that yours?''

    Vaughn-''Yeah'' (Alice goes to a diiferent room)''Vaughn''

    Syd-''Joey's Pizza.''

    Vaughn-''Sorry wrong number.''
    (Alice come back out)

    Alice-''Who was that?''

    Vaughn-''Work, I got to go.''

    Alice-''Bye''

    Vaughn-''Bye''

    (Alice's Phone Rings)

    Alice-''Hello''

    Voice-''Hey baby, you a lone''

    Alice-''Yeah, baby you thinken what I'm thinking''

    Voice-''I think so you want to come over to my place?''

    Alice-''Yeah, be there in a little while.''

    Voice-''I'll be waiting.''

    They hang up.

    Ok tell me what you think. IO think it's going a little fast, but maybe not.

    Kelli
     
  2. aliaschica47

    aliaschica47 Rocket Ranger

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    interesting....
     
  3. Alias*Kelli

    Alias*Kelli Rocket Ranger

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    Ok next.

    Chapter 2

    At the wharehouse

    Syd's POV

    Vaughn-''Hi Sydney, is everything ok?''

    Syd-''Yeah, I just got back from the mission'' Vaughn was the only person I could really trust he was my new best friend now that Will was gone. I could tell him almost anything I wanted him to meet Francie they could make a good cupple, ok maybe not, he has a girlfriend anyway, what's her name Alice or something I don't know.

    Vaughn-''Sydney are you sure your ok you seam a little spaced out.''

    Syd-''Oh yeah I'm fine, I just have a lot on my ming with the wedding next week and all.''

    Vaughn-''O yeah, Kendall wanted me to let you know you have two weeks off 'and not a day longer' as he put it.''

    Syd-''Ok thanks, heres the disk.''

    Vaughn-''So I take it that everything went well.''

    Syd-''Yeah, I just hate lying to Dixon like this he should know.''

    Vaughn-''He will soon.''

    Syd-''Yeah I keep telling myself that but it's almost been two years now and he still doesn't know.''

    She walked out and went to Danny's house to help him pack.

    At Danny's House

    No More POV

    Syd-''Hey Da... O My God''

    Danny-''What, Syd what are you doing here I thought you were gonna be at work.''

    Syd(now crying)-"What so everytime I go to work your goint to be sleeping with her.'' (She saw them making out on the couch)"So who is your little tramp.''

    Danny-''Syd this isn't what you think.''

    Syd-''What, so you wern't just making out with this little tramp on our couch may I add. So who is the girl I lost my boyfriend to can I at least know that much?''

    Danny-''Alice Gaven"

    With that Syd went back home and cried all night. Syd left early so she wouldn't get questioned be Francie

    Next day at the CIA in Vaughn's Office

    Vaughn-''Syd you look like hell.''

    Syd-''Thanks and you can tell Kendall that I wont be needing thosse two weeks off.''

    Vaughn-''What happened?''

    Syd-(she started to cry again. Vaughn went over and huged her)"Las-st night I-I f-found D-Dan-ny wit-th s-som-meon-ne a-an-nd I t-tol-ld hi-i-im that i-it w-w-as ov-ver.''(Vaughn and syd brook apart)

    Vaughn-''I'm so sorry''

    Syd-(she wasn't crying as much anymore)''Yeah well so is Danny and Alice Gaven, there really sorry they got cought.''

    Vaughn-(in panic knowing that it was Alice his Alice)''What was her name?''


    Tell me what you think I know it's not that good, but I thought it would be cool to write something like this. I know it's still going kind-of fast. Tell me what ypu think.


    Kelli
     
  4. kleverkitten

    kleverkitten Rocket Ranger

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    Hee hee hee... I wanna find out where this is going!
     
  5. Crawstinium

    Crawstinium Rocket Ranger

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    i like it! its a really interesting idea, more please :)
     
  6. aliaschick4mv

    aliaschick4mv Rocket Ranger

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    This is such a great twist!!! I love it! I want to see what happens!
     
  7. aLiAsFaN_14

    aLiAsFaN_14 Rocket Ranger

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    wow more soon this is a great story!!!
     
  8. Alias*Kelli

    Alias*Kelli Rocket Ranger

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    Does anyone think it's going just a we-bit fast. Tell me if you do because I think it is going a lot a we-bit fast.

    Kelli
     
  9. bluheart13

    bluheart13 Rocket Ranger

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    :D your story is going fine. please keep on going
     
  10. twinzz2003

    twinzz2003 Rocket Ranger

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    Wow, and may I say what a big twist. :D
     
  11. Kristina

    Kristina Rocket Ranger

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    MORE, MORE, RIGHT MORE!!!!
     
  12. Alias*Kelli

    Alias*Kelli Rocket Ranger

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    OK I'll write more tomarrow sometime. Go read my other story Over-hearing it's better than this one like a lot better.

    Kelli
     
  13. ILuvMichael

    ILuvMichael Rocket Ranger

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    i like it, keep going
     
  14. Sunfire_77

    Sunfire_77 Rocket Ranger

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    Thats good and OOOOoooooooooooooooo I am going to kick danny's little but along with alices ERrrrrrrrr :) PLEASE write more :)
     
  15. Alias Elle

    Alias Elle Rocket Ranger

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    Well, this has original written all over it. I'm very impressed with how this is going, but I do think you jump around a bit. Not a lot, just a little.

    ~Me :angel2:
     
  16. *Agent Legolas*

    *Agent Legolas* Rocket Ranger

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    This is REALLy good!! Please keep writing!!! :)
     
  17. spysurfergrl247

    spysurfergrl247 Rocket Ranger

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    ;) Pleas write more REAL soon!! :) :D im going crazy here!! :joker2:
     
  18. alias_16

    alias_16 Rocket Ranger

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    wow, that was good, but when is the rest gunna b put up?
     
  19. Scarlet Crystal

    Scarlet Crystal Bibbity Rabbity

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    hmmm... yes, when will we see more?
     
  20. Aliasgirl47

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    i love it! please write more soon!
     

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